Recent Comments

3/4/23, 7:21 AM
Wow, so many twists and turns and plenty of TF

3/4/23, 12:42 PM
@[Lusty Stallion](/user/show/10012213) I'm happy to hear you liked it! :)
3/4/23, 12:17 PM
Hope there will be a next chapter...
Anonymous
3/4/23, 8:07 AM
Really enjoy this series, glad you're back!

3/4/23, 11:38 AM
@Anonymous Thank you!
nobody
3/4/23, 10:31 AM
it feels like 2 will give more interesting routes moving on
3/4/23, 10:30 AM
Thank you Robin.
2/28/23, 11:59 AM
Please start using periods to break up your paragraphs into sentences. It would make the story so much smoother to read.

2/28/23, 3:11 PM
@[Nodara](/user/show/970256) Mmm i see plese if possible can give me an example of what you exactly mean? then maybe i can do better in future story someday also sorry i do it the most fast i can but at same time try to keep the best quality i can at same time

Martin
2/28/23, 5:18 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) For some reasons, all full stops are missing from your story. I just realized this now. It seems they got lost when you imported the text? It really makes it hard to read.

Martin
2/28/23, 5:19 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) I have to correct myself. They are there, but you love long... I mean loooong sentences :sweat_smile:

2/28/23, 7:57 PM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) i re read the story and the only thing i find near all you said was maybe when i imput action or reaction with the stylyzed letter in the mid of sentences? i do that for rps and have work until now maybe you think its better separate them all? i think was fine like that but if it really hard maybe we can ask if that can be edited or left the same way? also that happened as i have said because the rush too good thing the time was expanded so more people can participate :)

Martin
3/1/23, 1:50 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) I think it's a bit hard to read for people who are not used to that style. You still have a couple of days, so why don't you edit your story? I think it's worth it! I have to admit I had a hard time with it myself, and I'd prefer if it were written in a more novel-like format.

3/1/23, 6:21 PM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) ok then i try find some time for that i also later would apresiate hints to fix the thigs that make it hard to read and then thanks for the advice i wish the people enjoy this work hehe

Martin
3/1/23, 9:08 PM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) First of all: Use quotation marks to denote direct speech. And shorten the sentences. Add . and , to the text where appropriate. That helps immensely.

3/4/23, 5:41 AM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) ok i try one day to put on that i thin for quatation marks you mena "Hello my name its Bazir" right? sorry for late reply really busy days also thanks for the hits :)

Martin
3/4/23, 8:29 AM
@[Bazir](/user/show/911833) Yes, exactly like that. I think your story deserves to get that treatment!
Anonymous
2/26/23, 7:28 AM
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Anonymous
2/26/23, 9:09 AM
005 + 008 = 013? @Anonymous

Anonymous
3/4/23, 7:41 AM
@Anonymous brb headcanon that Dusk and Horizon have a big sibling relationship with each other and new drone