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2/25/23, 1:18 PM
I’d been anxiously waiting for the next chapters. Love where this is going.
2/25/23, 12:27 PM
This is a great start. Chad and Ethan are enjoyable characters. The spellbook means this could go any direction, the plant doesn't even need to remain an important part of the story you could quite literally take this any direction you wish. One thing I will say, because I myself was reminded of this recently, is that you ought not to use tags on a chapter that aren't in that particular chapter. A story will inherit all tags used across the story. So for example, no one was droned in this chapter. Maybe that will happen in a future chapter, but not yet. So save that tag until it's relevant. Great job and look forward to seeing where this one goes after the contest.
Anonymous
2/25/23, 12:21 PM
hot!!!
2/25/23, 10:37 AM
I really enjoyed this story, so I added it to my favourites. It would be really nice, if you go deeper into the settings, there is so much potential to build a huge world about boys getting turned into drones throughout multiple themes. Also for this story to be a bit more detailed. What is the protagonist feeling seeing all turned into drones, what does the process feeling like, what really happened to his friend… did he maybe even surrendered willingly? So much room for so much greater stories to come, keep it going ;)
2/25/23, 9:36 AM
Amazing. Can’t wait for more
Anonymous
2/25/23, 8:42 AM
Pretty hot, though I'd be lying if I said I wasn't hoping for some big locker room orgy(or perhaps out on the pitch?), even if this is more realistic. I do like that the romance theme is still present, will that continue in future chapters? And will we learn more about the drones?
Stu
2/24/19, 7:39 AM
This is my favorite of all your wonderful stories. Like others who have left comments, my only *complaint* is that it’s not long enough! For some reason, I find your seashells much more alluring than alien goo, etc. Plus, I’ve always loved the idea of a necklace controlling its wearer. For reference, other favorite authors of mine are Wrestlr, Eigh (where’d you go?!?), McGarguy and Absman420. And, honestly, I love it when a mind-controlled father (or stepfather) brings his sons into the fold. Doesn’t Alex have some college friends he’d like to invite to the beach during the remained of the time-share rental? Ditto Ryan and the dad? And please post that early story you mentioned that’s a riff on the Puppet Masters.

2/25/23, 7:28 AM
@Stu hmm which is hotter, a necklace controlling its wearer in a very parasitic way, or a necklace corrupting its wearer in a symbiotic way :thinking: :thinking: :thinking:
2/25/23, 6:48 AM
I am very interested to know who Anette is and how a supposedly ordinary princess can have so much mental resistance. Was she also a Wizard? A Cleric? Or maybe a Paladin? Finally there's complications for our manipulative mage. Waiting new chapters, best wishes!
2/23/23, 11:58 AM
out of curiosty, is the name daybreaker connected to dawn/Dusk?

2/23/23, 1:34 PM
@[temporaryhotsaucetofu](/user/show/10034005) Good catch! Can't reveal too much but we shall see... :smiling_imp:

2/25/23, 6:36 AM
@[Neon Demon](/user/show/10023852) extremely high quality, engaging choice of words, and a very enticing plot! aaaaaa
2/25/23, 6:06 AM
Wow, that was spectacular! Can’t wait to see where this goes next!