Recent Comments

Zander
2/24/23, 1:17 PM
Thanks for the follow up, would love to see Kortir interact with Roland often in later chapters.
2/24/23, 12:55 PM
Love the story! Really hot, can't wait to read more :)
2/22/23, 2:15 PM
This is a delightful set up and I love Greg and Dallas. I hope this hypnotist doesn’t ruin them by turning them into mindless strippers or some other bleak stock ending.

2/24/23, 11:50 AM
@[amul](/user/show/10003734) I don't really like cruel endings. Hopefully once I have an idea of how to continue, it'll be to your satisfaction!
2/22/23, 2:35 PM
Greg and Dallas are just incredibly endearing and sweet together.

2/24/23, 11:50 AM
@[amul](/user/show/10003734) I'm glad!
2/24/23, 11:28 AM
My goodness, there were a lot of pearl-clutching comments on this story, weren't there? Anyway, I loved the "IF GOD HATES GAYS, WHY ARE WE SO CUTE" sign :-)
2/24/23, 11:08 AM
Can't wait to see a programmer, slut, and worker drone in action. The prototypes sound hot, maybe something elite like a competitive bodybuilder or a strongman.
EntrancedGay92
2/24/23, 10:38 AM
Not a bad start. If you choose to continue writing, try and focus more on building up the tension/mood between your hypnotist and your subject. I find that makes the whole take down better and not rushed. Good choice with using a spiral, I love those. Finally, next time be sure you review the formatting before submitting because it's all one giant paragraph, which makes it hard to read.
2/24/23, 6:40 AM
I really enjoyed this and, like the others said, I laughed out loud a few times (eg at the mention of Lady Gaga). The ending felt a tad rushed but all in all, a terrific story!

2/24/23, 9:13 AM
@[Ruffcub](/user/show/21211) I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it :grin: Definitely agree about the ending, it just sort of stops.