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Jan 16, 2023
Marc
2/17/23, 9:41 PM
Very hot story. Thank you for writing and sharing it 🙏
Feb 17, 2023
LucasT
2/17/23, 8:42 PM
Hmm, I don't know what to think about this story. There seem to be some logical errors, like signing contract without hands? Or Tims Boss, who seems staggered with Tim not able to read, but obviously he had to be hired, did his work before without problem. As we know Tim and Fred seem to know each other quite a while. There are no information about background of Tim or Fred. And finally at the end Tim loses his mind. Debatable but after all of "all his thoughts and memories were being wiped away", there should be no option for him, the think about this situation as a "nightmare". All in all imho there is potential for improvement.
2/17/23, 8:16 PM
Would like to know more……like what/where is the voice & who it belongs too & what happens after…..
2/17/23, 7:52 PM
Great story can't wait for part 2
2/17/23, 7:13 PM
I really hope there's another part..........you really made my day ;-)
2/17/23, 6:50 AM
Really interesting how Damian's fate unfolds. And also, to ultimately have Stanley state it, that he somehow enjoys subbing for Marcus. And speaking of him, I'm glad he's more likeable in this chapter, than the previous one. You've build and interesting power dynamic between him and Stanley, and I'm very curious to see it develop with Rex in house. Possibly an alpha and a beta slave? If Rex was to join Stanley in chastity they could compete for a chance of unlocking, even if just to be denied either way. Anyhow, nice of Damian to stay to be a more prominent character from now on, he was a fun one when he first appeared.

2/17/23, 6:59 PM
@[Jet313](/user/show/10009595) Thanks for reading! Yeah I really like Damien and I kind of decided right away that he would become a main character. With Marcus people seem to feel kind of hot and cold about.
2/17/23, 6:19 PM
Loved this story!! I hope there is a continuation of Jake’s story!
2/17/23, 5:15 PM
Fantastic story!
Feb 17, 2023
Elm
2/17/23, 4:05 PM
There are a lot of things that I like about this story, specially the "read" command. It is a tad noticeable how it wasn't written by a person tough (it reiterates a lot, using the SAME words, instead of different ones for emphasis). Even while English isn't my first language I can tell something is off with the writing. Overall I liked it tough!

2/17/23, 4:23 PM
@[Elm](/user/show/567745) Thanks, Elm! That's really helpful feedback! You're absolutely right, the AI tends to like to use the same phrases verbatim, I have to kinda coax it to not do that with some creative prompting or else manually edit in those nuances. I'll pay closer attention to that when I edit next time! I ninja edited in some minor changes, hopefully it smooths things out a little!
2/17/23, 4:12 PM
Loved this story, definitely one of my favourites.