@had to be said I want to be a fucking slave boy please I'm so fucking horny for a real man's cock

@Buck (Approver) All good, and thank you!

@[Rad Pits](/user/show/2239300) I'm so glad this story intersected with your story preferences so well. I wasn't sure this particular story would have an audience, but if it was a near-perfect story for even one reader then I think it was worth writing. I had a lot of fun writing this one but definitely intended it as a one-off. Something to work on while I was feeling under the weather (I have a pretty bad cold at the moment) and didn't want to work on my on-going story which requires a lighter headspace. I will keep this mix of kinks in mind for the future though. Like I said, it was fun to write this one. Thanks!

@[amul](/user/show/10003734) I totally understand, but I do hope you write something related to this genre again in the future! Anyway, get well soon!

@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) I edited this comment shortly after sending it to be less inflammatory. My apologies if you saw the less thought-out version. I had a pretty different reading of this story, and this story is one I like a lot. There's a lot of meta-commentary and subtext that I appreciate here. In my reading, the protagonist wasn't ever a decent guy, and there's a lot of foreshadowing to this, and to the ending. The fact is, we don't actually _know_ him. We can easily identify with him at first, sure, but that ends up being part of the meta-commentary that this story is doing very well, in my opinion. The fact that Eddie is initially so easy to identify with isn't because he's a romantic self-insert type of character. Rather, he's written in a way that encourages us to make generous assumptions about him, as we relate to him. And the more we learn about him, the more our assumptions turn out to be wrong, and we're forced to rethink _why_ we related to him so much in the first place... When I was reading it, I felt it was clear that Eddie half-acknowledges his longing to _be as stupid and carefree as Andy_. In fact, he finds the new Andy so magnetic that he can't always tell if he wants to fuck him or _be_ him. Freeing Andy isn't only about 'ruining' his friend, it's also (in a weird twisted way) about permitting Andy to stay in 'a permanent state of grace'… even as the story itself is _very conflicted_ on this conception of stupidity as 'grace', and know it's as fucked up as it is compelling. The fact that Eddie's motivations at the end are fucked up and conflicting is a major point of the story, as I understand it. The fact that the story switches to third-person narration for a moment and points its fingers at both the reader for being drawn to this and the author himself for _writing_ this is, I think... extremely neat. It's a very neat way to write a story that expresses both fascination and conflict around a common popular kink (aka, getting dumb). And it's something I really like about this story, and my apologies again if you saw the earlier version of this comment. It was way more snappy and impulsive, and I realized shortly after writing it that there was a much kinder way to say the same things I wanted to say.

@[Nutiper](/user/show/25270) God damn, 26 comments on this story. The author must have done something incredibly awesome or incredibly upsetting, or both. I never read this one but obviously I need to rectify that. Thanks for bringing it up with the late comments.

@[Nutiper](/user/show/25270) Yeah well comments come through over email so I did read the original version a second after you sent it. Derek is my friend and I don't think that he would feel I was attacking him just by saying I didn't like the twist at the end. I think he will just take the note and move on in the exact same way I would. Maybe calm down a little bit before firing off such an angry message next time. Save a draft and don't hit send until you've slept on it. I feel like you have missed the point that not only is Andy now dumb permanently he's also got the contagious cock containment curse. Once that kicks in he's going to actually be unable to come until he lures someone in and then gets a week of freedom. Basically the protagonist has turned into a second Matt. After having Devon rescue him over and over he turned on his buddy. I just didn't see that coming. There's also now another person spreading a curse and quite a nasty one, so the stories protagonist is now going to be responsible not just for trapping his friend but for anybody else who his friend lures into get cursed. Edit This is Nocturne I'm apparently not logged in on my phone

@Anonymous Yeah I'm fully aware comments come through e-mail. It's why I clarified my edits. Look. Your comment wasn't you sending an abrasive private DM between friends. You're a prominent author leaving a very public comment. You're modeling behavior on a community site. I edited my comment because it wasn't behavior I wanted to model. No, I didn't miss the implication of the ending, as you described. (It would be pretty funny, though, if I managed to catch subtext and then missed major plot points.) You're lambasting a story which built its premise on "I think being turned dumb and beautiful _might be a better existence for some people_ than being smart and miserable... and what does it say about me that I think this?" But the way you're talking about the story isn't engaging with that premise at all, or the questions the story is asking. Like, yes, you're noticing the discomfort that a story like this is intentionally pushing at you. But I feel like you're noticing the intentional discomfort, and reacting to it as if it's a sign that the story failed... because it didn't leave you feeling comfortable? Derek's entire schtick has been exploring kink through ideas like "what if being a dumb horny jock is actually a happier and better life than being smart and miserable?" and "what if being too smart leads to moral and emotional corruption?" Like, he's really explicit about it in some stories? It even comes up in this story, to be honest, in a subtle way. Who are the two 'bad' guys in the story? It's the 'smart' guys who managed to permanently keep their brains. Like... it's a story intentionally playing with "What if being smart _isn't_ a good thing? What if the so-called 'victory' of the protagonist whom we've been rooting for isn't a worthwhile victory at all because, when they're smart, _they're a shitty person?_ And what does it say about me as a reader/author that I identify with him?" Like... I can read a story and say 'hey, this isn't for me personally!' but still really appreciate what it's doing? And as a reader and a writer, I just really appreciate what this story is doing.

@[nerdysuitedbaby](/user/show/164769) The last part already had a big argument between Matt and Oliver, so I didn't want it to feel repetitive. You should also have in mind that it's been over a month since Oliver started transforming Matt, even if he's only been in chastity for two days, so it makes sense for him to be more compliant at this point. About Oliver not needing advice from Kevin, don't worry, Matt still has a long way to get where Oliver wants him, and Kevin will help in that matter.