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2/4/23, 9:44 AM
Love this, should be highly rated. Particularly enjoyed the Doctor character and how he gets off by enslaving the young men- the master of all he surveys, even if he isn't explicitly involved in the action he'll be standing there with a big old hard-on in his fine suit trousers as he watches the young men play. Long live the perverts!
Anonymous
2/4/23, 9:34 AM
Hot tale. Loved it and so horny
2/3/23, 4:02 PM
Really hot stuff! I loved how the way its written makes the reader feel like they're being manipulated too. Would love a follow up chapter.

@Whitechap_e1
2/4/23, 8:47 AM
@[PuffDeamon](/user/show/10025400) Thanks, I have a partial second chapter but got distracted. Time to put my nose back on the grindstone. Huge fan of your work - love stories where there's something nasty in the woodshed!
2/3/23, 11:25 PM
I normally can't handle ruination stories. I felt like this one hit a bit differently for me. It still made me feel uncomfortable but it was more hot than it was uncomfortable. I think it helped that despite the cruelty with which Paulie's new family erased his life (the treatment of the photo of his mother was over the top) they did seem to love him, albeit in a twisted way. This wasn't a pump and dump ruination where the poor victim is left obese, 20+ years older, destitute, without hygiene and alone, presumably to expire from a combination of malnutrition, high blood pressure, and heart disease within a few years. I did find the revelation that Chaz and Nick were lovers to be hot and interesting. I wish it had been explored more in the story. I was pleased that Paulie wasn't left completely sexless, as I just find that rather pitiful when piled on top of everything else. I wasn't at all a fan of switching him from diapers to panty liners at the end, from the perspective of a diaper fetishist that is a bucket of cold water thrown on the story. The slow skin transformation was extremely well done, and a highlight of the story. The depilation, piercing, and tattoo scenes with the skinhead tattoo artist were another highlight. I kept trying to figure out whether the whole family was being controlled by Chaz or not. It was clear that he was the hypnotist. It was interesting that he was kept almost low-key throughout the story. It was a nice subtlety. Not that it wasn't clear he was the one doing the programming, but he never at any point stepped out with the storytelling equivalent to a boss health bar overhead. The story ended without my being able to tell who all else he was controlling, if anyone. I don't view that as detracting from the story at all. It was just an interesting feature.

2/4/23, 6:36 AM
@[amul](/user/show/10003734) I'm glad you enjoyed the story, amul. After you commented on part 1, I re-read it myself last night for the first time since I wrote it and I can't disagree with any of your points. I think erotic stories are a bit like masturbation; no one handles things quite as well as one's own hand.
2/4/23, 3:17 AM
oh man, what a great cliffhanger ending! I'm so excited to see what happens next
2/4/23, 3:10 AM
I'm glad to see you're back, pal! It was interesting to read a retelling of the first chaper but from another point of view and knowing more about this mysterious guy, I'm dying to know what happens next!
2/4/23, 2:01 AM
I loved it!
Jan 22, 2023
2/4/23, 1:43 AM
This is a fun story that engages with a somewhat uncommon kink. To me, the dental/orthodontia kink is so horny and you did a good job with it. The mind control sequence was interesting and fit into the story perfectly. You've obviously cleaned the text up from when you first published - I found only one small typo on casual reading: > He put on his gloves and asked Viktor to open. After checking his teeth he confirmed that they were misaligned, that affected his teeth aesthetically, but more importantly he had a bit of an overbite and that the mist convenient thing would be to get braces for his bite to work well. Viktor got nervous about the idea again. "mist" should be 'most'. Great job, story is enjoyable and hot.
2/4/23, 1:13 AM
Ooo would love to try either machine.
2/4/23, 1:05 AM
I enjoyed both versions of this story. The realistic one was a solid one-hander; short in length but long enough to offer some good details and bring everything to the point you wanted at the end. The magical re-write was also a nice horny story. I felt like the transformations were a bit too fast and easy, but they were very hot. Having read your more recent transformation story (for the Secret Satan contest) I'm comfortable saying you are improving your descriptions of transformations which is important for that kink. As far as imagination and horny transformation ideas, you're already there. Just hang onto what your brain is already telling you because it's great.