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2/1/23, 8:31 PM
Don't get me wrong, I understand it's almost definitely the author's kink, but I'm kinda sad Jace (jason) isn't a bit more of a demanding/controlling bottom instead of a brain-dead cock-sleeve. Like sure, he can get his brain-fucked out, that's hot. But you start calling him names and shit-talking and he just gets you off *immediately* and leaves you there wondering what the fuck happened. Honestly, I'd just like Jace to get someone who wants to show him a good, long, slow fuck.

2/2/23, 3:24 PM
@[Drawningghle](/user/show/10005957) Thanks for reading!
2/1/23, 6:49 PM
I’m gonna have to come back later and give more thoughts, but holy shit this was HOTTTTT!!! Jace is such an adorable character. Love this story, blue!!

2/2/23, 3:22 PM
@[SwimJock](/user/show/39947) Thanks!
2/2/23, 3:10 PM
The *hoodie*. Favorite little detail in this chapter! You really stick the landing here -- not just narratively for the noir genre, but the use of lights and colors to reinforce the mood. On the subject of rational actions, I think too many years of YouTube videos picking apart "plot holes" and "errors" in media has perhaps blurred our ability to think of characters as fallible humans instead of robots. (Don't get me wrong -- robot characters are hot too). It makes perfect sense in a story, especially a story with himbo antagonists, that not every decision is a calculated move of a chess piece. All that to say, really great conclusion! Looking forward to seeing this compiled as an e-book. :wink:
Gingcub
2/2/23, 11:58 AM
I come back and jerk off to the end part of this story so often. The total control, brutality, and mercilessness make me so hard. I really love it.

2/2/23, 12:39 PM
@[Gingcub](/user/show/10000534) I love this comment because its the opposite reaction from @amul comment above it! You guys represent the two types of people reacting to Marcus XD
1/26/23, 2:02 PM
WHen is the next chapter! Checking everyday. I want the boys to discover coach together! or... whatever you decide!

2/2/23, 12:32 PM
@[MChicago](/user/show/10024403) Sorry to keep you waiting bud but don't worry it is coming. next chapter is just taking a bit longer.
Gingcub
2/2/23, 11:21 AM
This is hot! Would love to see some cbt, milking, or chastity play come next with this setup.

2/2/23, 11:41 AM
@[Gingcub](/user/show/10000534) Glad you liked it! I'm more than happy to incorporate milking cbt and chastity, they all fit the theme nicely.
2/2/23, 11:13 AM
Someone commissioned me to continue this story, and with their permission, I'm posting the continuation in parts. Much gratitude to them for getting my creative juices flowing again. I'm trying to be better with writing this year (call it a new year resolution), but if you want to help spur me along, feel free to drop me a tip at my Ko-Fi :) https://ko-fi.com/beautemps
Anonymous
2/2/23, 10:56 AM
There's something I've been thinking about that might be forcing logic where it doesn't belong, might be hot, and might be crossing the line of humiliation. Colton probably had friends before moving to the city. Now that he doesn't have any access to a phone, wouldn't they wonder what's going on with him? That begs the question, will Colton meet his friends in his new state?
2/2/23, 5:48 AM
Can't wait for more!

Elm
2/2/23, 9:45 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) Second part of the first chapter is almost done! Didn't want to post the whole thing at once, since it was like 18.000+ words haha.
2/2/23, 9:34 AM
once again hot as they cum, great work!