Recent Comments

1/23/23, 2:36 AM
Just a tip. Add more paragraph breaks. It'll make your work much easier to read. Right now, it feels like a wall of text.
Lampshade15
1/23/23, 1:51 AM
Hot story, I really enjoyed this!
1/23/23, 1:34 AM
That was so fucking hot!
Hazard0707
1/23/23, 1:03 AM
Can't wait for the new 1
Hazard0707
1/23/23, 1:03 AM
Can't wait for the new 1
1/23/23, 12:59 AM
I have played around with ai dungeon before, I've made a post about my experiences with AI writing programs over in the forums. I have found ai erotica lacking, the writing ends up being odd and stilted and requires major re-writing to suit my taste. Now that being said, my taste is not necessarily everyone's taste. Some people really like my writing style, some people find it mediocre. But I can't make use of ai outputs that are in such a different style from my own, so re-writing becomes mandatory which rather defeats the purpose. With this story, the sequence of sex events is pretty good, but the description and emotions are mechanical and lacking. Where the ai really breaks down is the mind control aspect. The ai did not do a good job of establishing the hypnotists control over the 5 guys in an entertaining and erotic way. It just happens suddenly that everyone is doing what he says, despite not wanting to do it. That's really lame for a mind control story. I'm curious now whether this ai program is capable of doing a decent job with mind control. When I played with it I was not trying to get it to do that.
1/23/23, 12:33 AM
Still waiting for the next stories
Anonymous
1/23/23, 12:12 AM
Very good story, gets an A grade. Bad sentence structure, flips between first and second person, grammar issues, a D grade. Overall a C+ grade.
1/22/23, 11:31 PM
Orrin, you haven't been active in forever! How are you doing?
1/22/23, 8:52 PM
oh my great story will dream about it tonight for sure. thank you