Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/23/23, 12:12 AM
Very good story, gets an A grade. Bad sentence structure, flips between first and second person, grammar issues, a D grade. Overall a C+ grade.
1/22/23, 11:31 PM
Orrin, you haven't been active in forever! How are you doing?
1/22/23, 8:52 PM
oh my great story will dream about it tonight for sure. thank you
nycboot
1/22/23, 1:30 PM
I really am so turned on by this series - probably more of the psychological aspects than the diaper stuff. I love when characters struggle against and eventual change. I kept thinking that what needs to happen is some incident where Colton winds up crying and he realizes that Mike is his source of comfort and love. But he's not there yet. But I'm really excited to see where you're going to take this! Many kudos so far!

1/22/23, 8:52 PM
@[nycboot](/user/show/131279) Thanks, glad to hear you're still enjoying it. I'm kind of at a weird spot with this story. I've never written long-form fiction before and I know this story fails at being one-handed reading. I've always been proud of the fact that I can encase a hot kinky sex scene in just enough story on either end to make it satisfactory but that's not what I'm doing here. So this is new for me. I'm just letting the characters tell the story in their own time, and it wound up being a long one.
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 8:12 PM
Hot! I agree that it would benefit from a bit of additional polish, but you'll get there! And I love the premise.
HypnoSlave
1/22/23, 7:12 PM
Hey Edlam! I just discovered your work through this series and am glad that you recently posted an update about possibly picking it up again. Your writing is incredibly hot. Can't wait to read more of your stuff!
Jan 22, 2023
Anonymous
1/22/23, 6:10 PM
The story -- the substance is good. Really good, actually! The writing needs editing. Spell check and some grammar, but that's fixable. If you run MSWord, that takes all of two minutes. You'll appreciate it because it cures some of the syntax errors. Remember: you narrate not as you speak. That's why the editing is important. Keep going. It's a good start. I can't wait to read about the ortho-slaves in action.
1/22/23, 5:24 PM
Loved the story man!
1/22/23, 5:21 PM
I love the twist you give on the shaving segment. When you think he’s shaving his body hair or beard and turns out his shaving his head hair! Well written! And pretty hot and to the point! Much appreciated.
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 4:30 PM
The story is just FANTASTIC! I loved it. THANK YOU