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Hazard0707
1/23/23, 1:03 AM
Can't wait for the new 1
Hazard0707
1/23/23, 1:03 AM
Can't wait for the new 1
1/23/23, 12:59 AM
I have played around with ai dungeon before, I've made a post about my experiences with AI writing programs over in the forums. I have found ai erotica lacking, the writing ends up being odd and stilted and requires major re-writing to suit my taste. Now that being said, my taste is not necessarily everyone's taste. Some people really like my writing style, some people find it mediocre. But I can't make use of ai outputs that are in such a different style from my own, so re-writing becomes mandatory which rather defeats the purpose. With this story, the sequence of sex events is pretty good, but the description and emotions are mechanical and lacking. Where the ai really breaks down is the mind control aspect. The ai did not do a good job of establishing the hypnotists control over the 5 guys in an entertaining and erotic way. It just happens suddenly that everyone is doing what he says, despite not wanting to do it. That's really lame for a mind control story. I'm curious now whether this ai program is capable of doing a decent job with mind control. When I played with it I was not trying to get it to do that.
1/23/23, 12:33 AM
Still waiting for the next stories
Anonymous
1/23/23, 12:12 AM
Very good story, gets an A grade. Bad sentence structure, flips between first and second person, grammar issues, a D grade. Overall a C+ grade.
1/22/23, 11:31 PM
Orrin, you haven't been active in forever! How are you doing?
1/22/23, 8:52 PM
oh my great story will dream about it tonight for sure. thank you
nycboot
1/22/23, 1:30 PM
I really am so turned on by this series - probably more of the psychological aspects than the diaper stuff. I love when characters struggle against and eventual change. I kept thinking that what needs to happen is some incident where Colton winds up crying and he realizes that Mike is his source of comfort and love. But he's not there yet. But I'm really excited to see where you're going to take this! Many kudos so far!

1/22/23, 8:52 PM
@[nycboot](/user/show/131279) Thanks, glad to hear you're still enjoying it. I'm kind of at a weird spot with this story. I've never written long-form fiction before and I know this story fails at being one-handed reading. I've always been proud of the fact that I can encase a hot kinky sex scene in just enough story on either end to make it satisfactory but that's not what I'm doing here. So this is new for me. I'm just letting the characters tell the story in their own time, and it wound up being a long one.
Jan 22, 2023
1/22/23, 8:12 PM
Hot! I agree that it would benefit from a bit of additional polish, but you'll get there! And I love the premise.
HypnoSlave
1/22/23, 7:12 PM
Hey Edlam! I just discovered your work through this series and am glad that you recently posted an update about possibly picking it up again. Your writing is incredibly hot. Can't wait to read more of your stuff!