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3: The pleasure wall pt.3 The pleasure wall

byAshePleasure

Dec 23, 2024

BrainDrainboi

4/24/25, 10:12 AM

Hope we get a part 4 soon! This ticks all the boxes for me.

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byTwan Andersen

Jun 11, 2024

Uwu_Muscles

4/20/25, 10:15 PM

Iiiii don't know. Look, for what it is you wrote an incredible story. It's a really great pornographic story, and definitely one of the top's of this website, when it comes to the theme of mindcontrol. I just found the end incredibly unsatisfying personally. Do I write stories? No. I just read a shit ton of them and give shitty entitled opinions. If we veer into realism and landing on a satisfying ending, I found the ending personally to be very lackluster. MC is being raped, mindfucked and will suffer the consequences in many ways (one of which will be his education that is being partially torpeedoed since we can assume that his grades suffered) for the rest of his life. He really can't make any consented decision at any point of the story. And we are told by Ken that "he genuinely became one of the boys". To that I say, BITCH WHERE? He was their cumdumpster the entire time. XD So the choice of Ken to at the end to not "undo" the psychological horrific damage (which by the way is fucking INSANE) was a big turn off for me, personally. However, it doesn't have to be hot for me since that was the premise you where going for at the end. I just think it wasn't executed as well. It feels like you wanted to veer into an end where both Ken was forgiven and Leo was changed, and got to heal. So, if we enter a possible realistic end - since that was what you did at the end: It wasn't satisfying enough, because Leo is quite literally an absolute headcase at this point who can't make any decisions for himself anymore. The moment everything would've been lifted from his mind he prob would have a psychological breakdown and go to therapy for the rest of his life, becoming a miserable human being. He was fucked mentally, spiritually, emotionally and psychologically by these guys, specifically Ken. This could've been avoided by Leo growing as a person, and slowly undoing the effects over time and getting to do his own decisions on how he wants to deal with it. Ken giving him some form of control would've also been really, really nice. I have a shit ton of more thoughts on this, but I don't want to bore you. To end my comment, for what you did - a pornographic story on erotic mindcontrol - you done a great job. It's a well written story. But the editor in me is being a bitch.

Twan Andersen

4/23/25, 9:15 AM

@[Uwu_Muscles](/user/show/10031006) Well, you got me to break my hiatus with this comment. I'm going to be completely honest, I don't look that far into things when I write, my main focus is really the erotica, which I am perfectly willing to sacrifice realism for. I completely understand your viewpoint and it's more than a fair one, but for me to address things in a more realistic way I would have had to pour more time into this series than I had at the moment, which I didn't (and energy to write, which I do not have anymore). I rushed the ending, yes, because I really did not want to leave this series unfinished and it was always my intention to have Ken and Leo end up together. I always wrote it with the idea that Leo used to be a pain in the ass that was put in his place, but that what Ken did to him would become a turn-on regardless of hypnotic status. Same thing with Ken, while at first it's payback and Leo becomes just a fucktoy to him, his affection is genuine in all scenes in part 1/2, just like with the rest of the jocks. Sorry that it wasn't your thing.

Uwu_Muscles

4/24/25, 9:44 AM

@[Twan Andersen](/user/show/10018149) I'm sorry (LOL). I can see how my comment coerced you to reply. My intention with my comment was to let you know that I really appreciated the story for what it is. Sometimes, the content isn't our thing - which is why I then try to distance myself mentally from my own kinks and appreciate the story. I usually get to distance myself, if the ending is just as pornographic or intense as the rest of the story. But the ending made an unsatisfying 180° ending for me, personally and the realism made me feel very conflicted on the levels I've mentioned in my previous comment. With the background and intentions you provided, it makes a lot more sense now that you where never really going for realism. That being said, I'm not the authority on writing and you shouldn't be discouraged to continue to use these tropes if they help you to wrap up a story when in a clutch. I would love for you to grow as a writer, which is why I left my comment. Writing takes a lot of time and energy, and at the end of the day this is a way for us to express our kinks and fantasies. You got plenty of comments here that really, really liked what you did. And I'm definitely not a hater. Hope you're having a wonderful and rejuvinating hiatus.

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byCollaredBowtie

Apr 23, 2025

Benny

4/23/25, 9:18 PM

Looking forward to seeing how this goes!

CollaredBowtie

4/24/25, 9:01 AM

@Benny Thanks;3

Three strikes you’re a fag.

byDadisTopped

Apr 21, 2025

ONIX

4/23/25, 4:47 PM

Well F*ck me! This hit all my ...er .. buttons.... and made my joystick toggle. Really great One-off (rub one-off) ! Checked out your backlog. F'kn hot! Thank you for your contribution to the cause ;)

DadisTopped

4/24/25, 5:22 AM

@[ONIX](/user/show/2293671) This is so hot coming from you, Onix! Thanks!

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byCharlie Walker

May 1, 2023

Nasieonality

4/24/25, 4:40 AM

GOSH you are so good at creating a realistic set up. Good amount of background, decent character tells and behaviors and detailed but not too detailed physical characteristics. It makes it so easy to picture a scene. I'm hooked, can't wait for the next one. Excellent work!