Recent Comments

Martin
1/11/23, 9:00 PM
Cute and hot first sex story. Just as it's supposed to be :)
1/11/23, 9:00 PM
Well I like the series and there were some good parts in this one. It wasn't my favorite overall. I think I like this segments where Henry is breaking somebody's brain initially and it felt like this person had been pretty well conditioned. I'm not even sure that they were getting fucked for the first time but just thought they were. There were also a lot of run-on sentences early on in it that caused my editor brain to be distracted. It definitely like scenes where Henry is like dripping hot sweat all over someone and flooding them with pheromones and telling them to let him do the thinking for them and they are panicking and putting up a little bit of fight and losing. It is kind of fun to think of someone using their powers not just to have a good time but to compel the person to study. I mean I think we've seen this type of mind control used to compel the subject of the story to go work out but not to study so that was a good twist on the theme. A good twist on the theme.
Connor
1/11/23, 4:33 PM
SHOT MY LOAD!!! Amazing story.
1/11/23, 2:11 PM
Not entirely erotic. But incredibly written. Great world building. I’m a fan.
1/11/23, 1:05 PM
Very good. More please!
1/11/23, 11:39 AM
God you are such an awesome writer. You must have to go through a bit of editing to get it this polished. It's so compelling and has a great flow and escalation.

1/11/23, 11:53 AM
@[James Heller](/user/show/907806) Thank you for the wonderful praise. I edit as I go along, a paragraph at a time. I try to work on flow, eliminate repetitive word selection, reign in my overuse of adverbs, and catch mistakes. Then I read through my stories 5-6 times to stamp out typos.
1/11/23, 7:14 AM
What a great scene/chapter! Now I will have to check all the other ones! This one hit so many bits I enjoy! I think only the feet left me disinterested, everything else was perfect!

1/11/23, 10:40 AM
@[Delicious1papaya](/user/show/964605) Should have been into feet then 😌 (I'm kidding, thank you so much for the kind words!)
1/11/23, 8:45 AM
3rd from last paragraph, the first sentence was repeated
1/11/23, 6:14 AM
Wow! This story covered so many bases, all really hot, The idea of all the superboys, out in the multiverse, living their best lives, completely oblivious that they are being hunted - delicious!
1/11/23, 5:12 AM
Interesting. Jevon is my middle name, but I am most assuredly white.