Recent Comments

1/9/23, 11:48 AM
Yay! Thanks for the new chapter! I promise to not spam you with miscellaneous comments now! That doesn't mean I'll keep checking every other day though!!!!! Now to get reading.... ***Updates comment later*** Heh heh heh, wow,
1/9/23, 11:14 AM
Bienvenu à la commune des auteurs :) Une petite remarque: le tag «no sex» apparaîtra sur toutes les histoires dans ce série. 😊
1/9/23, 10:36 AM
Interesting concept.
GayWolf
1/9/23, 6:52 AM
This story is AMAZING and so damn hot! I love absolutely everything about it! I wish I could spend a bit of time with these beasts! Please write more stories like that.

1/9/23, 8:31 AM
@[GayWolf](/user/show/929022) Glad you enjoyed! Please feel free to check out my other work on Fur Affinity. https://www.furaffinity.net/user/werewolferyart
Anonymous
1/9/23, 7:21 AM
Yes! I am so glad you're continuing this. I can't wait for the next chapter.
1/9/23, 7:06 AM
What a damn hot series! awesome work!
1/9/23, 7:05 AM
Great stories! I'd definitely love to see that "Pied Piper" story expanded into a full-length.
S
1/9/23, 5:10 AM
You kind of cheaped out on the end of the story. You stayed tight in the viewpoint of Rufus up through the start of his brainwashing, and had events play out through his eys, but then you just switched to rapid-fire exposition for the entire final three paragraphs. Each of those paragraphs is a page of events if you let them properly play out as drama. You robbed your readers of the payoff of your good opening. When you're revising, bonus points if you can refine the opening three paragraphs to start off as dialog -- let us discover that Rufus is a lawyer by opening with him in court, finalizing some argument, or shaking hands with a satisfied client who just got off of charges. Maybe give him a co-lawyer from his firm, one of those former hotshots that Rufus broke earlier -- let us see that hotshot struggle to remember some basic point of law, and give us Rufus' internal monologue enjoying the struggle. The tighter you stay inside Rufus' head, the better this story will be.
Willie Cici
1/9/23, 3:51 AM
I loved it. It was dark, but hot. Great writing, too. A good example of writing and editing. It shows. Keep it up.
1/9/23, 3:00 AM
Even Al fell, really curious to see the next part.