Recent Comments

Sebastián Apollo
1/4/23, 7:31 AM
I think we're heading towards even more sexy shenanigans now that the existence of the book is becoming more and more widespread! Can't wait to see what comes next! Keep up the good work!
11/2/22, 8:35 PM
A great lead up but then a very rushed transformation, would’ve been nice to have it fleshed out a bit more. See the two guys even put up a bit of a fight instead of just giving in…

Anonymous
1/4/23, 7:15 AM
@[Readytochange](/user/show/240124) Perhaps a sequel where they try to resist starting with Asher can be written.
12/29/22, 10:35 PM
I liked the story but would think a bit of resistance and some manipulation would have helped make this a hot story. Not having mind control is fine but I just think a bit of manipulation would have worked. Like he does a thing that makes Matt more willing to comply, for example with me it's have my ears nibbled a certain way. That and/or maybe using a little bit of guilt to get him to start dressing up and give him a reason to like dressing up and make Matt think he's manipulating the situation but it's really Oliver. Lastly it could be a situation where his clothing was "lost" in the move and he's stuck wearing his boyfriend clothes for a bit and is brought around to wanting to dress like this. That's just some ideas.

12/30/22, 12:42 AM
@[nerdysuitedbaby](/user/show/164769) Thank you so much for your comment and ideas, I will bear them in mind for the next part!

12/31/22, 8:38 PM
@[formalboy](/user/show/10030609) No problem just figured I'd give some advice.

Anonymous
1/4/23, 6:38 AM
@[formalboy](/user/show/10030609) I hope you're continuing the story - good intro
1/4/23, 5:56 AM
This made me so, so happy. I love a good romantic happy ending, not to mention a sexy one.
1/1/23, 8:20 PM
A lot of spelling and grammar issued but a very creative and thoughtful story. Not too saccharine and not too sweet. VERY entertaining. I gave you 5's all the way down (assuming the sex part will be equally metered)/ Good job!

1/1/23, 8:42 PM
@[Stroppy Author](/user/show/227812) Thank you! I know there were a few grammar and spelling errors. A friend pointed out a few but by the time someone pointed out a few to me it was too late and I had already posted it. Originally I was going to have this posted closer to Christmas but forgot to save my work and lost power to my phone losing a major chunk of the middle. I'm trying to figure out placement for a sex scene without interfering with the flow of the story but I will be posting periodically throughout the next year on this story.

1/4/23, 4:16 AM
@[Stroppy Author](/user/show/227812) regardless. it was a sweet and welcome story. I wrote several of mine on an iPhone 5 from a hospital bed and received several comments about spelling and grammar. I don't judge based on that. I did enjoy the story very much
1/4/23, 3:43 AM
God I love this series so much! Like another commenter I hope Nick’s muscles aren’t gone for long but this chapter opens so much going forward and really makes me excited for what’s next! In particular Darius’ loss of inhibitions and the knowledge of exactly what was done to them make me look forward to how it plays out.
1/4/23, 3:17 AM
Absolutely delightful! It was so well constructed. A perfect combo of pure hot kink and utter romance. Loved it!
6/9/22, 7:28 AM
I'm glad I got a chance to read this! I love endings like this, it's twisted but almost wholesome somehow. Also the name Barkley is just *_Chef's Kiss_*

6/9/22, 12:45 PM
@Norismo Different strokes, I guess! When I read stories like this (and there are a great many of them, not picking on Artemis, I love many of his stories) I cannot escape the feeling that I'm witnessing a murder. The parts of the story that try to prop up the justification for the revenge always read like copes to me. "I was bullied." "he cheated on me." "he's a homophobe." Well yeah, and you're a murderer and that's worse so... is always my reaction.

6/9/22, 7:22 PM
@amul A lot of hypno stories are troubling if you allow yourself to think about them :sweat_smile:

1/4/23, 2:13 AM
@[Norismo](/user/show/2849185) @[amul](/user/show/10003734) I am such a Gemini that i happily agree with you both! I prefer stories that don't involve murdering someone. On the other hand if a 'murder' doesn't actually involve death or dismemberment, and is done gently and there are enough hot kinks involved, like hypnosis, mind control, transformation, power exchange, etc., i can focus on the good stuff and ignore the rest as just fantasy. (The good stuff isn't fantasy, since i am hoping some of it might actually happen!) One potential compromise to this dilemma is hypnotic triggers similar to those Paul installed in Bradley that allow maintaining the original personality, as well as other 'modes' like the 'Barkley' mode in this story for example. Of course when you're dealing with an impossible storybook douche like Bradley, the writer certainly has the license to try to correct the situation. In any case i did enjoy the story, and would like to thank Artemis for sharing his imagination and writing skills.
1/3/23, 1:37 PM
the dilf... the coach! Please bring him back! I love this story. Your writing is so good and captures me!

1/4/23, 1:49 AM
@[MChicago](/user/show/10024403) Don’t worry dude, there is a lot more of Coach to come ;)
1/4/23, 1:33 AM
Man, I wish I was Rocco's roommate! Well done!