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12/26/22, 7:55 PM
I am always up for zonking daddies, too bad that he wanted him as a top, but it was hot non the less~
Jay
12/26/22, 7:49 PM
Super fucking hot, dude!
12/26/22, 6:14 PM
Great start! Look forward to more

12/26/22, 6:33 PM
@[The Syrme](/user/show/14359) Thank you, and it may take some time but there will be more
12/26/22, 6:06 PM
So good! Really looking forward to more of this riveting tale!
12/26/22, 5:47 PM
I am so grateful for the slow seduction ... the words that brought him deeper into Brian's control. That was just so well-written and fantastic. I am REALLY into it.
12/26/22, 5:28 PM
i love this story - I am so nuts about the seduction and love that this boy is in charge. THANK YOU for your excellent writing style. Also, i love Belmar since i visit Avon each summer. So, I can just picture the people and the place. THANK YOU!
12/26/22, 5:25 PM
Oh god, I always love it when the bottom is the controller. This so hot, I need more stories with younger bottom hypnotizing older top.
12/26/22, 5:02 PM
Ooh so depending on how potent the reality change aspect of the computer is, one could have a section in the handbook about federal and state laws that effect things. So like by designing the law in the handbook it's like it was actually passed nation wide. Just a random idea.

12/26/22, 5:23 PM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) haha if nothing else, I'm hoping that this story is giving you guys good ideas, because some of you have touched on ideas in my outline and some of you have come up with stuff that's even better
12/26/22, 3:28 AM
Loved it! Amazing setup.

12/26/22, 5:22 PM
@[Jamiemboy](/user/show/10005561) Thanks so much!
Nutiper
12/26/22, 2:35 AM
lmao, I wonder how long it will take Barry to figure out that the administrator code is HOPE SPRINGS ETERNAL. This is such a *fun* chapter, with a promising set-up and a fantastic start! I'm especially enjoying the way you've seeded hints and clues of future surprises for Barry. A pure power-fantasy story with zero conflict or surprises makes for a boring story, so it's fantastic to see all these exciting implications for the plot! Like the complication of how Barry can't undo changes — it's such a great limit to the program, and hints that things *will* get out of control for Barry at some point (in a very fun-to-read way), until Barry eventually figures out the code and fixes it. I also liked the set-up of how other workers are clearly cavalier about entering the office when Barry isn't present... It's great foreshadowing, and implies potential surprises for Barry when one of those workers (inevitably) does something like make a change to the master handbook, whether to Barry's entry in the computer system or just to the rules at large. And, of course, there's that set-up with Frank. Barry may have made a rule that Frank has to follow all of Barry's commands... but there is a lot of wiggle room in how Frank might interpret that, since Frank is clearly still his own person. If Barry isn't careful, he might assume he has more control over Frank than he actually does... And that could come back to bite him. All in all, I'm looking forward to seeing what you come up with for this story — I'm excited to read your spin on things!

12/26/22, 5:22 PM
@[Nutiper](/user/show/25270) Haha well I will confirm or deny nothing until it's all written, but I like where your head is at, and I like that it appeals! lol Thank you so much for the encouraging words, I am honestly floored by how many talented writers on here are saying some really nice stuff! I hope I can do you guys proud and I love your work!