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12/24/22, 7:35 PM
Awesome! And hot. Super sexy. I like how the dad was like "I take charge" and so he became the boss of the thing. Very nice. Also yummy on the idea of the rimming, would have loved to see more detail. Hehe Good story!

12/25/22, 7:53 PM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) Glad you had fun! Had I more time, I'd have spent a lot more time on the rimming. Next time for sure!
12/25/22, 6:29 PM
Yes yes yes, I love this kind of stories. Young vs Old, big sub small top, all perfect <3
12/25/22, 5:02 PM
Great idea! Lots of potential. So, when it comes to my thoughts, I hope he is a top, stays dominant, doesn't loose control or have tables turned, and also doesn't ruin anyone's life, while having lots of good happy sexy fun. Oh, and that he rims asses before fingering and fucking them! 😀 But seriously, fun start. Interesting premise. PS. Ooh maybe he can find a way to update it to a master tablet so the tech meets the times. Hehe PPS. Oooh maybe he can increase the health of his workers. Figuring healthier workers are better workers. And loyal workers. And such. 😀

12/25/22, 6:12 PM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) thanks so much for your input and your kind words, it seriously means a lot! Those are some really intriguing ideas, I might have to use one or two!
12/25/22, 4:50 PM
I'd say poor Mr. Mouthslut, but I get the feeling that he's going to be living up to his name sooner rather than later. ;)

12/25/22, 6:11 PM
@[DBar](/user/show/1069522) Haha, you'll just have to read and find out!
12/25/22, 5:00 PM
Well done! I'm excited for more...longer would be awesome!

12/25/22, 6:11 PM
@[Kelly](/user/show/933626) Thanks so much for your feedback! I know it is kind of short, I was mainly trying to get down the rules of the world, the next chapters will hopefully be longer!
12/25/22, 5:36 PM
This absolutely has potential to grow into a series of chapters. Please consider that. The dynamic between the two characters was well laid out. And the conflicting emotions from Colin as he tries to grapple with his need and the cruse and his embarrassment are great. Maybe even expand on the kinks and gear that these two use as Colin remains under his control. Maybe Bryce can find a way to use the cruse to bind Colin to him permanently. And if rubber makes him feel that good, then maybe he needs to be put into a full suit?
nycboot
12/25/22, 5:18 PM
Great start!
12/25/22, 5:10 PM
Looking forward to more!
Anonymous
12/25/22, 4:36 PM
Sweet, sweet, gorgeous story. Some of the best character writing that I've ever seen.
12/25/22, 3:44 PM
Very good writing so far…..but I agree I would like to c what happens after that when the son turns the tables on the father….