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12/24/22, 12:51 AM
Hot as hell man.
12/23/22, 10:16 AM
I am really enjoying this story. I love the setup, with Lance making wishes every morning and only remembering the last 3. I love his flat mates. Kaden being a bit of a bully and Kyle going from bottom twink who loves Lance as Daddy to being a twunk daddy. It’s all very hot. I also do really appreciate how quickly you are getting each part out. Every day I’m anticipating another part with excitement. More description would be chef’s kiss for me. Some hint of what you thought Kyle looked like as a daddy, or how tall Lance is compared to both of the others. This bit in this part is gold to me: “ Jet after jet spits out of his massive cock as a pool forms on the tile floor.” It makes the story so much richer, to me, if the author and the characters (via the omniscient narrator) mention / are aware of differences between each other, or in relation to the rest of the world.

12/23/22, 7:59 PM
@[MonsterMash62](/user/show/3332) I can do that. the only reason I wasn't doing that was because of feedback in the past that indicated that people wanted to draw up their own images of the characters. As well as focus on the mental struggles that happen to highlight that more. Since you requested it, I can definitely focus on their physical descriptions next chapter.

12/23/22, 9:14 PM
@[MonsterMash62](/user/show/3332) I hope that the next chapter will address this request and appease.

12/23/22, 11:14 PM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Thanks for the reply. And the story writing! I hope you took away more from my comment than just “more description”. I have been genuinely enjoying the story and your writing a ton and am eagerly anticipating every new chapter. If you feel like writing more description, and feel it fits, I would love it. But that’s my personal taste. When I read a story, I want the writer to fill my mind with enough of a complete image, partially because I’m not terribly creative without a lot of effort and I’m lazy and don’t want to work to inject specifics. For the average story, a character’s hair color and style don’t have to matter, but they can help flesh out a lot of details. I’ll think differently about a guy with a shaved head vs long hair, with a baseball cap forward or back, with an earring. I can inject those things into the image in my mind, but again, I’m lazy and won’t. And won’t be consistent with them from reading to rereading. Everyone else definitely doesn’t agree with me. Some people definitely want fewer details. Some people want a complete blank slate. I can’t handle reading Lord the Rings myself; I don’t need to know what every individual blade of grass on a random, never reappearing grassy knoll looks like. I do like details that fill in a character. Kyle responding to Lance’s body, Lance responding to how much different or better he feels his body is to Kaden or Kyle, or anything else along those lines, really builds them both up and brings me more into the scene. Again, that’s just my personal tastes. Please only do what you want. I wasn’t kidding when I said the descriptions would be chef’s kiss for me - on an already great story. The most important thing is: please keep writing it. And thanks for writing :)

12/23/22, 11:15 PM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Thanks! That makes me even more excited about the next chapter :)

12/23/22, 11:37 PM
@[MonsterMash62](/user/show/3332) Oh I did take all that away from what you said and am deeply grateful that you are enjoying this story so much. Your kind remarks and compliments do me so much good that you have no idea. I have a learning disability around writing so it's always a challenge. I use Grammarly a lot to help with the editing. Basically, what I am saying is your high praise fills me with so much pride about the hard work I put into stories. It helps quite the voice in my head that sometimes tells me to give it up.

12/23/22, 11:53 PM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Keep writing :) But do it for yourself! If you find your stories hot, someone else will. Easier said than done tho. Tough to ignore doubts and all that. Glad you’re liking the comments. They were always good fuel for me too when I was writing.
EJG
12/23/22, 10:10 PM
Damn..I wish you hung out his punishment a little longer.Theres a whole college,even a whole town,other family members that could use the little pig.?. One fag being used by many ALPHA's is hot. It's not certainly everyones fetish.but i like dark,evil sadistic twists now and again.Good does not always have to win.And it's only a fictional fantasy.!

12/23/22, 11:03 PM
@[EJG](/user/show/1050471) I mean, the murder got punished! As far as I'm concerned, good triumphed, lol.
Anonymous
12/23/22, 4:53 PM
Christmas came early, and so did I! Excellent charter, as always

12/23/22, 10:21 PM
@Anonymous Thanks! It sat in drafts longer than I would have liked, but I was determined to get it out before the end of the year.
12/23/22, 4:30 PM
There's some great character work in this chapter and the conjugal conjugation scene was very playful and funny!

12/23/22, 10:20 PM
@[time.to.occur](/user/show/1662851) Thanks! It was fun writing it.
12/23/22, 1:20 PM
I’m still very into the asshole nerd Lewis fucking jaces brains out. Obviously the romantic in me likes the thought of Jace and booker ending up together. But a couple of nerdy fuck boys along the way makes sense to me.

12/23/22, 10:19 PM
@[Mrdick](/user/show/1001656) Thanks for reading! No spoilers, but I do like to mix some spice in with the sweetness when I write smut.
12/23/22, 9:14 AM
Always a treat to get a new story from you. I really enjoyed this. You write lovable himbos very well and the main character in this does not disappoint in that regard (especially given how smart he also is). I love the setup. I love that he’s surrounded himself with oblivious big dicked nerds. I’m excited at the possibility of more, with him possibly jocking them all out too. I’d be happy for him to end up with Booker, but would love for him to sample a few others on the way there.

12/23/22, 10:18 PM
@[MonsterMash62](/user/show/3332) Thanks for the comment! You know me too well :sweat_smile: -- there's definitely some muscle growth planned for future chapters.
12/23/22, 7:00 AM
As a bi, I like Greek lol

12/23/22, 10:14 PM
@[ganymedesJockstrap](/user/show/10002453) She's fun to write! I stole her from another story that's languished in drafts for a year.
12/23/22, 4:50 AM
Oh wow interesting and fun. I hope Booker rims and fucks his ass first. Very interesting though.

12/23/22, 10:13 PM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) Glad it was interesting!
12/23/22, 3:58 AM
I like the way that Jace is still retaining a lot of info about his interests and academic stuff (latin isn't exactly easy!) but he's still also quite dumb. truly someone can be very brainy and knowledgeable and also still a complete and utter himbo

12/23/22, 10:10 PM
@[gargayle](/user/show/10018766) Thanks! I like to spice my himbo jocks up a bit.