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12/19/22, 12:39 PM
why stop at the first price? why not coax homosefuality out on the king as well as the advisers and the royal guards?

12/19/22, 4:42 PM
@[darkblade2814](/user/show/243317) I hope this doesn't come off as rude but I write the characters the way they are because it is the story I want to tell.

12/19/22, 5:25 PM
@[Boundaru](/user/show/1489834) I'm sorry, I got carried away, you were not rude

12/19/22, 7:02 PM
@[darkblade2814](/user/show/243317) It's ok, I appreciate feedback but I can't respond to an endless number of 'what if?' scenarios. I appreciate that you enjoy the story enough to read and respond though.

12/19/22, 7:11 PM
@[Boundaru](/user/show/1489834) I will stop with the ideas, about the chapter itself, the plot is progressing, and letnsee where it goes
12/19/22, 7:10 PM
Once again the story improve as I read a new chapter.
12/19/22, 6:57 PM
Once again, the story has gotten better. Fantastic chapter.
12/19/22, 6:39 PM
Loved the first chapter. I am anxious to see where you take Sean.
12/19/22, 5:53 PM
Hey, hey anpother classic from Malskin. Keep 'em coming (cumming)
12/19/22, 5:44 PM
By far the best chapter yet. Perfection!
12/19/22, 3:27 PM
Accidental wishing! The beginning of a hero’s downfall??? This story is hot and heartwarming. Can’t wait for more. Happy holidays.

12/19/22, 5:43 PM
@[Coq au Vin](/user/show/916716) Thank you!
12/19/22, 4:48 PM
Another great chapter , Jack. WTG!
12/19/22, 10:54 AM
The story keeps building up quite well, great job.

12/19/22, 4:40 PM
@[Twan Andersen](/user/show/10018149) Thanks I appreciate the encouragement :)
12/18/22, 7:48 PM
OK, so I did really like this chapter. It was a bit different for me than the first one. In the first one when Danny is put under he's kind of a blank. But it seems that when he gets told he's going to be going under for at least a month at a time, he prepares another personality that he's going to take on when he's under. Now that's very different. I don't know what it says about me that I am more turned on by a blank drone than the sexy slutty version that appears. Don't get me wrong -- I'm turned on by both!... but if I had to choose... LOL So it wasn't until the end that I asked myself "What was the little trick that Gerald told him at the end that we weren't privy to?" And then I decided it must be to use the wooden chest and have Danny put what he wanted to be into the chest first, then take everything away, and then bring back just what Danny had put in the chest. But that wasn't immediately obvious to me as I was reading. I think maybe the reason chapter 1 and the blank Danny turned me on more than super slutty Danny is that I could understand Noah's horror at what he had done, and that made his lust and all the sex they had even hotter to me because it was despite that horror. In chapter 2 since this is the personality Danny hand picked -- and apparently with no input from Noah because it was a total surprise -- then it's just what Danny wanted to be. So Noah interacting with the new slutty Danny doesn't have the same conflict on Noah's part for me. If anything Noah pulls back because of the really needy and bratty behavior of slutty Danny. As for a name... I don't have a specific suggestion but depending on what you plan to do with this character, I thought something with a little nefarious edge to it might be appropriate. I just got a feeling that the new personality might have a darker side. His desires are on overdrive and he's very insistent that he wants what he wants. I think a character like that would perhaps do some darker/evil things to get what they want. Or if the new personality begins to realize that a return of the old Danny means he will cease to exist he might want to prevent that. It occurred to me before it occurred to Noah that bringing Danny back means having him open up that jar of all his old self and take it all back on. It probably also means taking the slutty personality and removing it/putting it back into the trunk first. Neither of those things is guaranteed that slutty Danny will want to do. I also had this little idea pop into my head -- although I'm hesitant to voice it because once I suggest it I doubt you'd want to use it. Spoilers and all that, I guess. But here goes. Danny didn't really like the idea of being brought back every month. So what if Danny thinks he outsmarted Noah on that point. What if he created this slutty personality to take over when he was under, and one of the hidden directives for this slutty personality was to prevent Noah from bringing him back at the end of a month, even just for a check-in? Now there may be various ways of doing this but one way I thought of was for the new personality to PRETEND to be Danny again just for the brief check-in. But the old Danny was never really brought back. Maybe Noah would have suspected something at the end of the first month when he did the check-in.... something about the old Danny that just didn't seem right... some mannerism or personality quirk the new personality isn't doing quite right and doesn't even know it... but he puts Danny back under (which isn't actually doing anything because he was never brought out of the trance) and then the next month during the check-in he already has his suspicions and is watching for signs that it isn't really Danny. It was just an idea that went through my head is all. And then as for a vote for what to do next... I say go back to Gerald. Whoring him out to strangers doesn't seem like something Noah would want to do, and taking him to a bar or club and letting slutty Danny go at all the men is basically the same thing... it's just taking Danny to the men rather than bringing the men one by one to Danny.

Martin
12/19/22, 3:49 PM
@[Pwrliftermscl](/user/show/941605) What an amazing comment, I'm truly humbled! I totally understand that you're more into mindless sex-doll Danny than into slut-Danny. If you read my other stories, you know it's the same for me. But I wanted to create a bit of variation here, otherwise, the story starts to repeat itself. But I think there's enough room to play with both - or even more concepts in the future. The important part is, that Danny himself, the real one, is still there and that he's actually experiencing being these personalities himself. Which makes all the difference for me. Noah has to ask himself how to make Danny retrieve his original personality, now that in Danny's mind he's ejaculated it all and it's now simply spread on the floor... :) That's going to be an interesting challenge. One I have some ideas about. Interesting idea you have there. It could be an alternative storyline but as you've written it, it doesn't match what I had in mind. So no problem there. I do encourage you or anyone else to create their own storylines and add them as branches to this series. I'd be more than delighted to see that happening! I am motivated for the third chapter, now it's just a matter of finding the time to write it... Thank you again so much, and if you haven't done it already, please remember to rate the story as well. The second chapter still has a surprisingly little number of ratings so far.