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Anonymous
12/14/22, 1:49 PM
As always, this is great!! I honestly can't wait to see how this will affect the group dynamic. Would love to see our good pastor descend into even more depravity!
12/14/22, 1:20 PM
Will Mav,Troy & Mason Join Gray & the others at their school? I hope so. In true Jack style the story gets better as the chapters advance, bravo!

12/14/22, 1:29 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) Eden will be an ew cast of characters if I ever get around to it.

br6205I sincerely hope you do& I know it will be awesome.
12/14/22, 1:44 PM
@[Jack Parker](/user/show/10016753)
12/14/22, 12:55 PM
Are Connor & Troy from Top Dawg? I love seeing Mav showing his true self. Hope we see Troy fuck him & a boy should not have man's hair, he must lose his body hair as a further humiliation. It is the one suggestion I think suitable for many of your stories. But of course these are your babies to do as you please & I'll love whatever you write.

12/14/22, 12:57 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) No they are new characters I added for the story, other Eden kids to enjoy.
12/14/22, 9:24 AM
Wow. It's getting so good! I hope Lance doesn't turn into a jerk of a jock. I hope Kyle and he stay good friends and lovers. Kaden could easily become the new fuck boy for both.

12/14/22, 12:47 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) What will happen is yet to cum. All in due time.
Dylan
12/14/22, 12:42 PM
Hey Martin, even tho the plot is usually not for me, i read it without being able to stop. Well told story, great writing, plausible to the point even i could "believe" in hypnosis. But , to be honest, i felt what Noah felt as he abused the mindless sextoy that Danny turned into. It seemed like a jerkoff to a boring porn video. It helps to execute a bodily function, but doesnt quence the thirst. And in the end? The guilt Noah felt, and the emptiness, the helpless try to make it better for his hurting companion. It felt so so true, it almost hurt. Sorry, you are a great writer, but this story was not for me. Thx anyway, i always seek your advice. Dylan
12/14/22, 1:40 AM
What a great story. What I liked is how you, in a believable way, describe both the progress in Noah's techniques, aswel as the deep love and complementing desires between the two. And how Noah sexually etruly njoyed his power. Restrained only by his feelings of guilt that he might be abusing his partner. At one time, he will get convinced that this really is what Danny deeply desires. And he would feel more free t take a further step. So I am interested in what will happen then. Will he turn his boyfriend into a toy for longer periods? It would not be my ideal of fun, but it certainly seems to be so for Noah. He could find a way to make Danny work and live as a successful and social student when he is out of the house, and his sex doll while inside. Holding all the power and holding the key to the jar of Danny's personality. Permanently. Perhaps it would not satisfy him in the really long term, but he might lack the techniques to bring Danny back to his jar and open it. And he would have to turn to Gerald again for help to get Danny 'back' That would be possible only if he would be able to meet Danny inside his trance state, and take him by the hand from there. But ... how much do we know about Gerald and his reactions when he suddenly has full power over two, so cute boys???? OK, I let my fantasy drift off. Only excellent stories have that effect. So please consider that to be a big compliment for you.............

Martin
12/14/22, 9:07 AM
@[Portuguese Lion](/user/show/572598) Thank you so much for your long and amazing comment. Full of interesting ideas :) I already know exactly where I want to go with the second chapter. Some of it not far from your own ideas, other things totally different. I want to make sure that I don't start to repeat myself, which is not that easy. I might even break up the story at some point and allow separate storyline to be explored. After all this is the new feature of the site... I really appreciate your compliment, and I'll send Danny your way to show you how thankful I am!

12/14/22, 12:29 PM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) Thanks, I am excited to hear there will be a second part!
12/14/22, 12:23 PM
Hot. You should do more.
12/14/22, 12:08 PM
Jack this is awesome on the level of Top Dawg & the Parker Bros. I can never marvel how gifted you are. The only pity I have is that you don't extend these great stories.
11/10/22, 11:30 PM
Wow. This was awesome. Can’t wait to read more

12/14/22, 11:33 AM
@[Dream maker](/user/show/908635) Thank you so much!
11/10/22, 9:41 PM
Nice. Hope there is more.

12/14/22, 11:33 AM
@Jonanator Thank you so much!! I have some ideas in mind! :)