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12/3/22, 6:00 PM
love to see lex have this dominance over superslave

12/4/22, 12:07 AM
@[curiousj](/user/show/10030564) Hey CuriousJ! Glad U R enjoying the storyline!!:sparkler: I told U if U were patient that the story would go in the direction that you desired (wink-wink)!!:smiling_imp: Stay tuned 4 more curveballs (& twists & turns, for that matter--LOL!):baseball: Gr8ful 4 your positive feedback & continued interest! ENJOY your weekend!:sparkles:
12/3/22, 11:15 PM
Ooohh, so exciting. Things got hotter with the student teacher dynamic. I wonder how will Cameron blends/interact with the other two "slaves". Looking forward with the next chapter.
12/3/22, 9:13 PM
I loved the original JPS, and this is a really nice reboot. Super hot, and it really hits a number of my kink buttons perfectly! One comment with your writing, sometimes it’s a little unclear. Like, does he have carpet in his bathroom, or did he head back to his bedroom? Did he have two or three fingers in his ass when Sammy found him? A little more attention to the details will help readers like me stay in the story and not get distracted trying to copy-edit on the fly 😅

12/3/22, 9:57 PM
@[Noam de Pluma](/user/show/1403470) Very fair. I do have a few proofreaders who take care of things for me, but sometimes things fall through the cracks.
Sebastián Apollo
12/3/22, 5:38 AM
Charlie, you have no idea how much of a genuine joy it is to see the next chapter of Luke's adventure get uploaded! I actually originally starting following you on Literotica, then I found you on Twitter, and that led me to GayKinkyStories, so I suppose I owe you thanks for introducing me to such a great site and offering of erotica. Greatly written, balancing both comedic tones and sexiness. Luke's almost-aloofness is both adorable, endearing, and his casual sluttiness about the entire ordeal is hot as hell. Watching a young baseball stud slowly degrade himself into a living self-lubing fleshlight has only brought the perviest of smiles to my face! Sammy is a sweetheart, and Mark was a fun ride! Keep up the good work!

12/3/22, 9:56 PM
@[Sebastián Apollo](/user/show/10029736) Thank you so much! I'm a big fan of your writing too!! And I'm honored you discovered this site through me :) I'm glad you are liking the non-porn elements too, that always makes me happy to hear.
12/3/22, 5:42 AM
Wow. I think I just discovered a kink for men with strong moral principles. I'm crushing hard for coach after this and he didn't even have to take his clothes off lol. Great chapter, happy to see some new characters in the doctor and the nurse :)

12/3/22, 9:55 PM
@[AdibHass](/user/show/910212) Well there's only so long a man of fine moral character like Coach can resist the sultry charms of Luke's ass :)
12/3/22, 8:19 PM
Really great story. Build up with excellent and the muscle worship was visceral. I don't know that I'm actually interested in Temple details but I would certainly love to see these guys fucking and have the bottoms mind getting blown by having his friends dick inside of him and his massive muscular body physically overwhelming him.
12/3/22, 7:55 PM
This was hot!
12/3/22, 5:55 PM
i live to serve the virus
Dec 3, 2022
Anonymous
12/3/22, 9:53 AM
I’m a sucker for a good Superman story, so my thanks go out to whichever friend persuaded you to post this. And to you for writing it too, of course! ;) If I might offer an editing suggestion to help elevate the story… (and future stories, I hope!) Most of the story is a single wall of text, which means it all starts to blur together. Throwing in paragraph breaks would make it so much easier to read, and give some of the story beats more time to breathe.

12/3/22, 5:49 PM
@Anonymous Thank you, I will definitely keep that in mind. Formatting has always been one of those weak points for me
12/3/22, 3:19 PM
Scorchingly hot—the sex scene pulled me along so well, not to mention my investment in Beau’s travails through the club itself! Something I found really fun was the way Beau sort of leaned into Ethan’s suggestion power, using it to make himself more comfortable. Such a useful power to have!

12/3/22, 4:28 PM
@[Soren Fitz](/user/show/10011670) Thank you! Ethan as gay training wheels was fun to write around 😁