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12/3/22, 3:19 AM
This story is such a ROMP! It is hot from start to finish while also being very, very funny. I love all the different racers and what a blisteringly hot finish!

12/3/22, 3:21 AM
@[time.to.occur](/user/show/1662851) eh, I had a good editor :wink:
12/2/22, 11:55 PM
This is an amazing take on the genie. Going freelance and taking a price is a great premise.

12/3/22, 1:39 AM
Thank you very much @[Evan Jackson](/user/show/133763)! It’s a weird premise, but I’m glad it worked out.
12/3/22, 12:41 AM
This chapter really brought everything together. The work function misunderstanding was hilarious. I loved how oblivious Bobby was. The labels on the singlets is great. And being able to overcome their training shows a great amount of power. The portal opening. What will happen next!? Eager for more.
10/20/22, 12:35 PM
Lavender Lad, thank you so much for your input. Can I ask you if would be so kind to help me with grammar?

Lavender Lad
12/2/22, 11:42 PM
@[Slave Darius](/user/show/530524) Sorry for the late reply! GGS doesn't always show me when someone replies to my messages Anyways moving on. both the activation and deactivation phrases are in a grammatically incorrect form the activation phrase shagalah Can be eitherشغلَwhich is male past simple form(he worked it/he activated it) or شغله which is male passive and as a word is mostly used to mean a person is engrossed in a specific task or is ruminating over a past event depending on context. Atfiah أطفيئه is imperative but the subject is not the person receiving the command, the word literally means in this case "close it" or "extinguish it". If you use a direct imperative Form(ishtaghelإشتغل and intafi'انطفئ) for these two words it would sound very unnatural in Arabic and instead the noun of these words would be used in this case tashgheel تشغيل and itfa' إطفاء (activation and deactivation) but if you want a direct imperative form i would suggest something more poetic as اشتعل ishta'el and انطفئ (become aflame and become extinguished) which would some more natural in this case but tbh i don't think anyone would care as i am probably one of the few people who speak Arabic as first language here lmao anyways good story
12/2/22, 8:52 PM
Hot. Hope more comes.
12/2/22, 8:12 PM
Since everyone's life is different so is every journey of discovery of sexuality. It's nice to just see a character figure things out rather than completely panic at the growing realization of the truth.
12/2/22, 6:48 AM
What a fantastic story! You do a great job setting up the seeds for the ending in the very beginning ("Wish for a sex slave" is one of the first things the genie says). The casual mentions of each client also hints at a whole world of possibilities (who was the old man, and what was the "tab" he owed?). And despite the undercurrent of tragedy--someone losing all free will--the ending remains oddly happy, especially with the revelation that SOME intelligence, like the ability to work a phone, remains. You hit the perfect balance in intellect loss, characters being morally gray, and a light tone with a dark undercurrent. Well done! :)

12/2/22, 7:41 PM
Thanks @[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832)! I’ll admit, I wrote the “sex slave” line just cause I thought it was funny… and then later I realized I could make it come true. As for the old man, my theory is that _someone_ has to pay for every change, and the genie is a bit of a sweetheart so he had the man “pay” for everyone having sex in the steam room by taking his old age and restoring him to youth. It was my way of showing that the genie isn’t all bad. “A light tone with a dark undercurrent” — I love that description.
12/1/22, 4:17 PM
Icon's company plan is really falling apart because of Darkweb, how delicious! Can't wait to hear about Reader though. and What's going to happen with Archie? Loved this series, i just marathoned it all! hats off to you, good sir!

12/2/22, 4:18 PM
@[Mind Labyrinth](/user/show/910312) Glad you've enjoyed things so far! I hope the get the next chapter out soon, but I've been bedridden all week and I'm only just about ready to get back up to my computer. Fingers crossed that I can start soon!
12/2/22, 12:37 AM
Hot. Hope you do more.

12/2/22, 3:22 PM
@Jonanator I will! Thanks!
12/1/22, 11:37 PM
It's very difficult to deal with faith/religion and being gay. Having struggled with this myself I like your approach. The slow character development is good. It's not like Isaac is instantly gay. Very true to life!

12/2/22, 2:55 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) Yeah, this was a serious struggle for me, too, and I wanted to portray some of those major steps that had to happen. Few of the characters in this story are fully as *devout* as I imagine you or I were—there’s a little bit more room for their growth, and I’m following the cues of the movie this is inspired by in giving them a sort of… looser or more flexible stance. At the same time I didn’t want them to seem absolutely flippant. It’s not perfect and a longer story might have done the struggle more justice, but I’m glad there’s still some good stuff here that you found relatable!