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Zai
11/2/22, 10:26 AM
Holy Butt Fuck'in & Cock Suck'in, Dude! This is one H🔥T and 'Sin'tillating tale of debauchery and hidden lust revealed! The way you've written Superman's dive into the world of wicked passions since chapter one for me reveals his truest, innermost self concerning his sexuality. Superman, aka Clark Kent is a natural born cock craving, cum guzzling bottom boi. Lex has brought out the Superhero stud's need to be dominated; both with words and actions. The once clean cut Kryptonian hero is now a dirty, turned out slut whore submissive, a true BITCH! Superman, aka SuppaFag, aka SuperQueer, aka Supercocksuker, etc, etc, etc, is now and will always be Lex Luthor's prime, grade A turned out Slave! I cannot wait for more of this orgasmic AU! Are you planning on bringing Batman into the story? I'd love read about Lex capturing the Caped Crusader as the superhero is snooping about. Then, oh then, the bald, supervillainous stud makes Batman his next hero to Be Bitched! I sooooooo imagine Batman in his classic physique hugging body suit with those Skin Tight briefs! And Lex eventually fucks Batman's mouth and ass with wild abandon. Unlike stripping the Superman out of his costume, Lex slits Batman's Speedo-like briefs right over his hole and then plows the sexy hunk hero into Neverland. Forever! As the hot villain bitch's Batman, he uses Batman's penchant for calling items Bat-? Like Bat-mobile or Bat-arang, etc. But as he's conquering another hero ass, Lex uses terms such as Bat-pussy/Bat-cunt, etc, further cementing his new, dominating hold on the Caped Crusader. Plus, Lex will then be able to gain access and control of Bruce Wayne's companies, holdings and monies. Thanks for sharing, Dude! You Rock!
11/2/22, 8:35 AM
It was an interesting concept, without a doubt and well-written as always, but the sexy part of it felt like an afterthought and rushed, as if making sure you fulfilled a checklist. Honestly would have been better had it not been specifically featured, but implied.
11/2/22, 7:53 AM
Always a fan of something lighthearted and fun. Love it, more please!
11/2/22, 7:45 AM
This might just be your hottest story so far. Excellent idea and writing! I was also glad to see chastity incorporated into the play. Truly a great piece of writing!
Anonymous
11/2/22, 7:12 AM
would love to see John in slutty lace panties getting owned and begging to have his pussy stuffed like a slutty bitch.
11/2/22, 4:52 AM
Kinda wish he kept the double peen but o well. Good story, fun read.
Gear_dm
11/2/22, 4:03 AM
Nice so far :) kinda curious what happens to Brandon and Scott...
11/2/22, 1:37 AM
I love a good atmospheric story, and this was atmospheric as _hell_. Really great stuff, particularly when the party and ritual began. If you publish a sequel I’m absolutely here for it to see what Havoc has in mind, and to learn more about Holden and what makes him tick. I feel like we just scratched the surface of his personality and I want more!

11/2/22, 3:35 AM
@[Noam de Pluma](/user/show/1403470) I'm really grateful for your thoughts! I am definitely planning for a sequel when Time allows (I'm such a taskmaster). I'm glad you appreciated the party and the ritual in particular! I tried to earn that.
Cuddle-switch
11/2/22, 12:46 AM
Another playfully written, pants-tightening ride from Time! How you cut and arranged the scenes really gave the impression of how confounding Holden must have been feeling, and in general you seem to have had a lot of fun play with our sense of, well, time. I loved how you seamlessly bring up information from the past. Particularly when Havoc skims those memories. What a great way to reveal info while still making sure it feels natural and fluid. Mysterious and sexy from the start the evolving sense of eeriness and need kept me intrigued and invested in Holden's difficult position. Even in the end when I thought I had everything figured out you still managed to throw in interesting details and draw me in deeper. And the writing itself! I loved the way you still were able to give a strong impression of who Evermore using so little dialogue and detail. It was very effective. And one of my favourite parts of this story is the chants. They were clever, and honestly they just sounded legit. I could imagine the chanting in my head as I went along. I could go on and on, but suffice to say I loved it. Thanks for yet another delightful and horny read!

11/2/22, 3:33 AM
@[Cuddle-switch](/user/show/10019969) I am so grateful for your support in the writing process and for you picking out your favourite highlights! I was definitely experimenting with jump cuts and lean storytelling for this one, since I usually have trouble writing anything short. Thanks so much!
11/2/22, 12:34 AM
I really liked this story. I found the beginning dragged out a little bit too much, but you got me hooked once the ceremony started. That part really glued me to my seat as I wanted to know whether Holden's preparations paid off. And what these preparations even were. The flashbacks to Holden's preparations worked, you managed to make it clear this happened before, but I find it good practise to make it as foolproof as possible that it happened in the past. Again, you made it work, but I did reread a paragraph just to double check that I was right in assuming it was a flashback. When Holden and Havoc were talking in his head at the same time it was difficult to follow who was talking. I got the gist after a while, but I wish the mental dialog was treated like proper dialog. For this very reason I often intersperse actions or thoughts of a person during dialog to let the reader know who is talking while avoiding the "he said she said" ugliness. Wish that had been done here as well. If you let me nerd out for a moment: The real life refernces are a double edged sword. Personally I try to keep it to a minimum or avoid it entirely, but I realize it's a matter of personal preference. _However_, the tome is older than the binomial name Ferula drudeana. Ancient texts wouldn't have called it that, and since you stayed true to the real world, it is not proven to be Silphium either. An extremely minor nitpick, I know, but still. One more thing, I found the end a bit disappointing. I did not expect a cliffhanger. The way I see it no arc has been concluded, not Havoc's and Holden's, not Evermore's and not the order's existence. While the story did end in a different place from where it started it did not resolve anything. All in all, this was a very enjoyable read (despite a slow start) and I am looking forward to part 2. (You gotta.)

11/2/22, 3:31 AM
@[Cockatrice](/user/show/620105) Thank you so much for the feedback! I'm glad that there were parts of the story that you enjoyed. I appreciate your perspectives on pacing, flashbacks, and dialogue, but personally disagree and trust the reader with the signposts that are there. From one nerd to another: I actually already knew all about binomial nomenclature, the different opinions around whether Ferula drudeana is Silphium, and so on. I decided that in my fictional little world, Ferula drudeana *is* Silphium, that it has been called Ferula drudeana for a long time, and that this Chaos Demon hated it and tried to destroy it. It made for a more interesting story to me and allowed me to play with the meaning of the Latin. So, this was a deliberate choice. To me, the arc of this story was the question of whether or not Holden would become possessed by Havoc. I am definitely planning for a sequel, but still told the story that I wanted to tell here. Thanks again -- it's so great to hear your thoughts. I'll be working on that sequel~! <3