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10/27/22, 12:22 PM
Really interesting story. I think the mental reshaping of the two heroes was especially well-done. I found the shifting POVs to be a little jarring, especially at the end when we get our third 1st-person narrator, who's never identified directly.

10/27/22, 9:23 PM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) A fair point about the last section. Keith does let us know that it's 'Ian', but it's true I never confirm it. It was something I thought about at the time, but I had felt it was fine.
CMC
10/27/22, 7:02 PM
I really liked this story. Superheroes becoming nameless enforcers to a corporate overlord is a great idea. A round of proofreading would have helped a lot. But I really like them being defeated by fake versions of themselves and being more confident after the change. I'd love to see more of Flow's new life as a corporate enforcers.

10/27/22, 9:20 PM
@[CMC](/user/show/116210) Thanks! Flow will be back doing his new thing, but (a) Blur will be the main focus of the next chapter.
10/27/22, 8:04 PM
My favorites parts on this and the previous chapter are the thoughts of self-deprecation and self-debasing of the main characters to their identities as heroes.

10/27/22, 9:16 PM
@[Plymouth58](/user/show/1353762) Glad you liked it! I love seeing heroes being reduced to a fragile mess, so I'm happy to hear you enjoyed that too!
10/27/22, 8:38 PM
Nice! well written too, hope there's another part planned :D

10/27/22, 9:12 PM
@[fleed412](/user/show/1031132) Thanks! There is, with a slightly different dynamic,...
10/27/22, 9:09 PM
Is it strange that I picture Betty White as Zeb’s mother explaining this all from St Olaf?
10/27/22, 6:47 PM
Any chance of getting more to this story?

Sebastián Apollo
10/27/22, 8:22 PM
@[HornyGayGuy](/user/show/802077) Maybe, I designed this as a oneshot, but I may return to it if the demand is great enough and I finish up some other story ideas I've been working on.
10/27/22, 7:51 PM
SFF normally isn't my jam, but I loved this story! So well written and amazing world building! Also, sitting in Mark's lap sounds like heaven
Oct 26, 2022
10/27/22, 6:11 AM
Arab daddies 🤤🤤🤤

peachy
10/27/22, 8:07 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) thanks so munch for liking my stories I love your rings series so much!

10/27/22, 11:59 AM
Great job, I love this story! Very hot! I hope there's a sequel, or maybe a prequel featuring that neighbor who saw him while gardening.

10/27/22, 6:47 PM
@[peachy](/user/show/10029966) Oh wow! Thank you right back. 🙏❤️
10/27/22, 6:46 PM
Another GREAT sequel to this Dylan-saga. I'm so curious about the next chapters and all the fun Dylan will have during the summer. And I hope to read some more about Robby. Dylan - please keep going!!
nycboot
10/27/22, 6:28 PM
I was hoping it was a week-long festival! How come Zeb doesn't call his mother to get clarification? I still totally love the names - they crack me up each time Zeb mentions a new one. I hope by the end that Wes loves being the reincarnated (or possessed) Haassen-whatever.

10/27/22, 6:34 PM
@[nycboot](/user/show/131279) : the canonical reason is because Zeb’s Meemaa doesn’t have a landline…she has to walk to the pay phone in town every day at 10 sharp so people can call her if they need to., and Zeb has been…otherwisse engaged..so far during that time window. I meant to make this clear early on but these dudes just keep going straight for the sex and it’s weird to pause the action to discuss Luddite Midwestern cult communication strategies mid chest-cum-dump. Thanks for asking, though, it’s been bugging me I haven’t clarified. :farmer: