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Anonymous
10/11/22, 8:39 PM
Mwah, chefs kiss
10/11/22, 5:55 PM
Definitely well worth the wait. Can’t wait to see his subconscious commands in action 🤣. I love this series ❤️
Anonymous
10/11/22, 5:20 PM
This is amazing and can I say what an amazing journey to go along side him!
Carus
10/9/22, 1:17 AM
It'd be amazing and 5* if the issue with using the wrong plurals gets fixed. As it tends to use "midshipmen" when it should be "midshipman". "Emergence" should be emergency etc. However that's really the only issue with it.

10/9/22, 5:58 AM
@[Carus](/user/show/10001298) Thanks for pointing out the midshipmen vs midshipman mistake. I completely overlooked that. Grammer and mechanics are the weakest part of my writing so I'm sure I'll (and others) will find more as it's reread. But I'm glad to hear it was still a good story

Anonymous
10/11/22, 6:44 AM
@[sirjocktrainer](/user/show/949652) how do u read said stories

10/11/22, 12:51 PM
I'm unclear what kind of story you mean by said stories? We weren't talking about any particular kind of story?
Anonymous
10/11/22, 12:37 PM
Can't wait to see where the next chapter goes.
10/11/22, 11:11 AM
Great suspenseful set-up, but I didn't really feel like there was much erotic pay-off at the end. And then the last couple sections just confused me, with too many unidentified speakers and unanswered questions. (Like, why does Lance have TWO doctors supervising him? Why do the doctors have such similar last names? How complicit is each doctor with the brainwashing plans?) Also, one editing tip: do a find-and-replace operation to change each "Feris" to "Ferris" and each "Solider" to "Soldier."

10/11/22, 11:38 AM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) Yikes! That's a lot of typos,... Thanks for pointing them out! I didn't expect 'solider' to not be flagged as a spelling error, so I didn't even look. If someone said something was 'solider than something' I would just look at them and ask it they meant 'more solid than'. Do people say 'solider'? Ferris is entirely my fault. Also, I should have renamed the second doctor, but I only even noticed the similarity in name about half way through. There are two doctors to simulate a peer-based assessment. Firez is on-site physically seeing the subject, but Ferris is off-site somewhere safe reviewing and cross referencing. I'll think about this. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!
Oct 11, 2022
10/11/22, 5:10 AM
I feel like the "No Sex" tag here isn't quite accurate, since we do get a scene of heterosexual intercourse (even though it's so brief and perfunctory I get the sense the author was holding his nose while writing it).
10/11/22, 12:28 AM
Wow this was a bit darker than I’d hoped. I was hoping that Scott would find a way to reverse the spell so that Luke becomes Alex’s, as was originally intended. An interesting story nonetheless.

10/11/22, 4:06 AM
@[ls1999](/user/show/2758081) The story was always about Alex trying to change someone else with magic and getting changed himself so this was always his fate, but I have to ask, how is Luke being magically changed against his will not as dark as Alex changing himself by accident?
10/11/22, 2:15 AM
Fuck fuck fuck, this branch is so freaking hot!! 🤩
Oct 10, 2022
10/11/22, 1:56 AM
Masterpiece ! Build , characterization, execution and originality. Hot as hell and written like a pro. Instant classic. Hats off.