@Michael I'm glad it did what it needed to do!

@billi Hello, Billi. Thank you very much for your feedback. In no way would I take your comments badly, since you're expressing a constructive criticism in a very clear and polite way, It's a total pleasure to receive comments like yours. I'm glad you like my writing and characters! Thanks a lot! Perhaps I underestimated how dark I've been making the plot since both you and Stroppy Author have commented about the same point in a row. It is a fair criticism, I wanted to go further than what I have usually seen in superhero stories and go not only for the super part, but also for the private life of the hero and affect everything around him. I personally like stories where there's tension and struggle, where you can't really predict where the characters will end up and the characters fight hard against what they have in front of them, that's something I've been trying to do here. You know now the saying goes, "the night is darkest just before dawn", and this is "the blackest night" for GL. I can tell you that there is still a stretch of the night to go, and I really hope you don't decide to get off the train at this point. I think we just got to the halfway point (I guess, I'm not very good at measuring my chapters in advance). I would love to know what you would think about the next chapters, and where I'm planning to take the characters. But I fully understand if it becomes overwhelming. I apologize in advance if it turns your stomach, but I have always believed that a protagonist is measured by the size of his enemies (although given my tendency to go over-the-top, my villains can be a bit too excessive). The next chapter will finally explain why the villains act the way they do, and maybe shed some light so we don't overly demonize them... they still have some more some bad stuff, but not all in them is bad . I think that in the end, more than being trully evil, Chuy and T-Bone are extremely resentful. Thanks a lot for keep reading, Billi!

@Plymouth58 Hello Plymouth, thank you for your reply. I did not want to discourage you or make you change the direction of the story. That is not my intention. I am more of a sucker for romance, love and the good feeling stuff. When there is mind-control and acting against the subjects wishes and hopes involved I usually prefer either the punishment of the guilty or a talk it out-make up-choose it yourself scene and neither of those I can see in your story (at least not at this point. I get what you mean that you can only appreciate success when it comes with struggles and hardships but... idk... I just can see GL ever going back to his old self. He is losing so much. Now Dave and Terry are in the thugs mind-fucking grasps as well.. Everything seems so dire right now but if that is what you were going for then that is a good thing! Just because the story is not everyone doesn't mean it is bad. Continue it the way you envision it. According to the many replies you get there are a lot of people who love the story :) BTW I have send u a message in the forum.

@Bootman I hear ya. I’ve always wanted to be a hypnotized robot, but hypnosis doesn’t really work on me no matter what I try. I’ve never been able to relax, ever, so I don’t know what ‘relaxing’ feels like. Even when I’ve had downtime and just laying there my mind is going a million miles an hour. I’ve even had an in person hypnotist try. I have an extremely vivid imagination (that seems to semi-autonomous, giving me images when I don’t want them) and can follow every single direction perfectly except for “relax.”

@Dreadmage23 thank you for the review! I'm glad you and your boyfriend could enjoy it together!

@nerdysuitedbaby My motto has always been "Write what you know" :rofl:

@Anima I really want to keep going but I just started a new job so that takes up most of my time, I've got a new boyfriend, and I've also been writing some non-porn in the little time I allocate for writing. So while I hope I can continue because I really enjoyed writing I'm not sure when that will be 😭

@Tyrol Oookkkaaaayy lol I guess I can wait a while longer.