Great start! Lots of potential here.

This is a masterful addition to the story. Alternate reality it may be, but what a commission. Thank you both for bringing this into being. I really enjoyed the original story but there are layers here that I find feed into Two Tops Make A Bottom as well as giving a more romantic conclusion. Trevor and Connor surrendering to being nectar addicted sex slaves in the original was a hot ending, don't get me wrong on that. But that choice had a little less impact given it was a reaction to being betrayed and enslaved again and the best of limited options. The mushy-mindedness from the nectar over time also diluted the sense of their connection to one another and their ability to express it. This version of an ending gives them a status in the tribe and makes their staying and integrating into the society fully a decision and choice. An appreciation for the men and the culture they have journeyed through. An simplicity away from the traps of city life. They get to be romantic with one another, even fulfilling a legend. And they bond with both one another and their old team who also chose but they chose the life of a sex slave and love it. Trevor and Connor, and the three sluts all chose where they wanted to be and show us two sides of the coin at once. As much as Jared is a jerk, his being unable to trick Trevor and becoming a Qayllar, having to be fucked, suck cum and piss, and fighting against losing himself to that lust and enjoying bottoming those big cocks makes for an even sturdier foundation for his toxicity in the sequel story and how much he looks down on bottoms and subs. Self-hatred through and through. I like the idea of him also figuring out a way to restore himself from the supplies he stole. Though to then use them to inflict his own previous fate on others. He's quite a bastard isn't he? It is fun to have both of these endings to compare. There's something to be said for a succumbing ending but also an overcoming and going native ending. Either way, congratulations on creating a story and lore that so many people enjoy and can delve into it.

I just looove all that humiliation. It's so hot and creative

More!!

I really like that in the end he doesn't stay a blank puppet but is actually happy and proud of what happened to him. Making him enslave himself by giving his downfall all to his doing was amazing

Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!

Mmmmm love it

Great story. Go on and make more obedience of both boys and girls. Add toys, motorbike gear…

This is shaping up to be real hot, love it and keep it up!

Very good! :3 I want to read more of your work ^ ^ 💙