I have to agree with the comment about losing your plot. another point is the lack of character description. you spent so much time repeating yourself and not giving any details on what characters looked like or what their cocks looked like. you glaze over those points and introduce more and more characters and at some point, I hope there is some solution to his ordeal cuz so far his inability to get out of his situation has crossed into full rape, mental and physical abuse, and has less and less to do with submission and degradation in every chapter. right now Mark's situation has crossed a line into sheer hopelessness and that's just not sexy.

Woah, just amazing to know my story inspired you. Thanks a lot for mentioning it! :)

Thank you for update Pls more and stay strong 💪💪💪

Great Story!

I wish he gets some bodybuilder slaves that he fucks

Wow it keeps getting hotter! Love it!

I imagined Legoshi from beastars

Let's talk ambiguity: In writing the decision to be specific or ambiguous is an important one. How much detail and information should you give the reader? If you give too much detail the reader can get bogged down in it or distracted and the chances of logical inconsistencies increases. Not enough detail and the reader might become confused on what is happening. This is especially true for erotica. Give too little detail and they can't picture the scene you're describing. Give too much and you have characters describing dick and foot sizes as if they're carryi g a ruler everywhere. Not knowing the true origin of Ellias makes him much more menacing, and is a good use of ambiguity and withholding information to set the mood. Describing the characters in detail makes it much easier to picture the transformations they're undergoing. What I want to talk about is the most brilliant use of withholding information in this story: Justin. When it comes to Daniel and Steve we know their exact age, height, hair color and ethnicity (Steve's isn't said but implied by details). Even for the neighbors, whose ages are ambiguous beyond "young/ college" (and not aging is a plot point) we know their hair color, what sports they play, and pretty detailed descriptions of what they look like. For Justin we have none of that. We don't know his height, hair color, ethnicity, or age. He talks, so he's probably 4+, but still young enough that Steve can carry him and he can squeeze into a bed with two muscle bros. He goes to school, but that could imply preschool or higher. In my head i pictured him as 5 or 6, but he could easily be older. The reason this is so clever is because it means we don't know how they got him. They talked about trying everything, adoption, surogacy, ect, but we don't know which path actually succeeding. There are no details about raising him from infancy, about any other parents he might have had, or about who he is related too. We don't know if he's Latino like Daniel or blond like Steve (of course there are blond Latinos, but Steve doesn't seem to be one of them). Both bros even say he looks like the other and thus they're not sure which, if either, is the biological father. This is important because it means we don't know or care if they're motivated by biological instincts. They're chosen family, and despite all of the difficulties, they chose Justin to be their son, and they refuse to give him up. When the bros have to make the choice of Justin or the neighbor bros, they choose Justin, not out of a sense of biological responsibility but because they've fallen in love with him, just like their former selves did. Justin could be biologically related to them, or he could not, but that doesn't matter. He's family, they fought to get him, and they'll fight to keep him, even if it means punching god in the face. To a least extent, it also means that when the bros realize he's their son, we don't know how much of that was because of his loojs or because of something remaining inside them (or their one brain cell actually working). I don't know if any of this was actually on purpose or if its just because Justin is only one step removed from a McGuffin and so describing him in detail wasn't important, but it still makes the story better than it would have been if we knew everything about him and where he came from.

Been a fun series!

So this is so long after you wrote this, and you may not even check this anymore. But at the beginning of this chapter Theodore had apparently had an orgasm so good is legs were still shaky. Did i miss a chapter, or is my hunch of him being the "impostor" that busted down Ashers throat happen to be said orgasm? :3 Anyway way late to the party but i didnt see anyone else metion that in the comments.. 😅 P.S. Love the story man, great stuff. 😈