MORE PLEASE!! I keep coming back wishing and hoping and praying for more.

Another fantastic chapter. Hot as always. And fill of confusion. I hope coach can help, even just as an easy. It is important for a boy to have someone he can trust. I'm also hoping he can find a balance with his need and makes things up to Mark and Sammy do they don't feel avoided or used. While the motivation is clear, it breaks my heart that poor Mark is left feeling lonely and avoided. And that dear Sammy feels betrayed and unloved. With luck, coach can get our boys had clear and he can mend some fences.

I really enjoyed this script. It was like watching a paid infomercial. I can't wait for the next part. I want a demonstration of the throat cock. Cocknose made me chuckle. :) Thanks.

I loved it. Such a mysterious world you have created and I'm excited for the next parts!

Amazing news

Excellent beginning! I can't wait to see what happens next to these hairy men.

It's been a great start and I can't wait to see more of it :D

LOVE this series BUT I do hope Luke and sammy become a couple. Its the romantic in me LOL His dream had me worried it was Very HOT and it is a fantasy in a fantasy world. Amazing writing!!!

Thank you for the great second part, even if a longer story would be great you found a really good end so the fantasy of us can be used to see the future of the three / four guys.

Best damned first chapter i 've read on this site. It's so frucking good it cries out for many, many succeeding installments. .Two VERY minor English -teacner critiques: 1. You need to individualize.each character. When the most prominent way of xharacter development is either the narràtor stating what the xharacter is thinking, doing, saying, feeling, OR your quotations are not individualized to the point that the reader can tell immediately who is speaking just by attending to the voice in his mind reading the quoted speech on the page. Most often, attribution phrases ("said Georges.""Larry exclaimed." should beouldé bé redundant or even superfluous. Everyone haa his own mini-dialect of English, andi each of your xharacters should have one, too. The way any xharacter makes a statement or response will vary depending on his knowledge of his environment at that point in the plot; his emotional and intellectual stance regarding what hé wants to say--and what hé wants to avoid saying. Each character is--must be!-- unique. Every time a character speaks, there's pretty much only one way he's likely to say what hé wants to say The author should know his characters far better than the reader every will. And early on, the author should think and ruminate on how each character would react or5 reply to various stimuli and challenges in the story as it unfolds. Avoid exposition and summary. Don't tell. Show, demonstrate, reveal. Quotations are really good ways to show, demonstrate, reveal but quotations should be reasonably unbland. Quotations that.merely describe the latest plot device are useless, or even pernicious. Far better is a quote that reveals feelings, or demonstrates why something has or haa bit happened, or shows (for example) why Jocko, the shemale foot fertishist podiatrist has run off to join the circus. After all, as was elliptically alluded to in the early parts of the first chapter, those of us who KNEW Jocko, REALLY knew Jocko, figured there was some reason why hé was always telling dirty jokes about aerialists and pregnant camels. (Question: How do you get a three-hump camel? Answer: Get a two-hump camel pregnant. How you go about is up to you. AHAHAHAHAHA! Belch!!!) Actually, Jocko was telling us all we needed to know about his kinka and his possible future plans. Merciful Heavens! It were just like the disciples and Jesus. The disciples didn't understand the parables until after the Resuscitation. We're gonna have to study on this one with Brother Phil come next Wednesday night. TTFN, Lohengrin