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Anonymous
9/1/22, 2:43 PM
The creativity is off the charts!
7/21/22, 5:49 PM
That was an interesting way of continuing this series, but the writing style.... The story keep switching from 3rd-person focused on Aaron, to omniscient 3rd person, to second-person to 3rd person focused on Lou and finish as some weird mix where I was struggling to understand who's POV if any we were following. Still good, but nowhere near as good as the first two chapters. =(

9/1/22, 2:12 PM
@BobbyBlobfish has completely right. I must admit his remarks
5/31/22, 3:49 AM
An incredible chapter! The balance between the drama of the baseball game and the aching pornographic content of the sex scene was perfect. You also do a great job reminding the audience that, while Luke DID use a horrible slur and broke Sammy’s heart, Sammy himself was rather deceptive and making assumptions (especially because this chapter continues to make it clear that Luke has absolutely NO ability to pick up on other people’s sexuality or desires unless it’s extremely explicit). It’s also interesting to see how this condition is literally changing Luke’s body…can’t wait to see what happens next! You are an incredible writer! :D

5/31/22, 10:39 AM
@Feed Your Head So I personally feel like Sammy wasn’t being deceptive at all. Taken from his point of view, it’s entirely reasonable to think that Sammy and Luke’s feelings were mutual. At worse it’s a breakdown in communication, but as well as Sammy knows Luke, he’s not a mind reader. It’s important to me that Sammy is shown in a good light, not as a bully or someone manipulative.

R P
5/31/22, 2:05 PM
@Charlie Walker I don’t think Sammy comes across as manipulative at all. He seems to be genuinely trying to talk with Luke about what they have going on in the previous chapter. At worst Sammy maybe seems a little too caught up in his own crush so that he hadn’t noticed the somewhat mixed signals he was getting from Luke.

5/31/22, 2:27 PM
@Charlie Walker Oh, oh. Don’t worry—Sammy is definitely NOT a bully, or even a manipulative person! I think, as R.P. said, the worst thing he did was get caught up in his feelings and make assumptions, which is something a lot of people do. My own interpretation of him as a little manipulative is purely my own baggage (I’m someone who has struggled with communication and boundaries between partners in the past). Plus with Luke as our POV character (and a well-written one at that), it’s natural that we might start assuming his perspective. Sammy is a great guy, and I hope that he and Luke reconcile! But to do that, Luke needs to start talking about things, and he seems to struggle with that…

9/1/22, 2:12 PM
@Charlie Walker I am pleased you said that & agree with you
Evan
5/31/22, 7:51 AM
I feel really bad for Sammy. I really hope Luke can wake up to himself and they can reconcile. Also hope he doesn't mind Luke being a huge butt slut. What a stellar sex scene. Just amazing! So damned hot the two of them. And their inability to be in control. I have my suspicions about Mark's cock. Perhaps he has his own curse he's contending with.

9/1/22, 2:10 PM
@Agree
9/1/22, 2:04 PM
thank you for the second chapter, great story
BottomBear29
8/4/22, 6:05 AM
MORE PLEASE!! I keep coming back wishing and hoping and praying for more.

8/4/22, 12:03 PM
Don’t worry Chapter 7 is coming! I’m taking a short breather and working on a new project. If you want to read more nasty sex from me, check out Coach Tom’s Rookie Mistake @BottomBear29

8/31/22, 8:25 PM
@Charlie Walker I originally started with Luke then went to the Coach story but it quickly became clear I needed to read this one first. I am a romantic & hope Luke & Sammy & Mark all make up and develop a threesome and the Coach helps all of them. But that is just me & this is your baby & I will like wherever you take it & us your fans.

8/31/22, 10:32 PM
@br6205 Don't worry everyone will get a happy ending, it just might not be the ending you expected ;)

9/1/22, 1:36 PM
@Charlie Walker Thanks .
Evan
7/3/22, 6:07 AM
Another fantastic chapter. Hot as always. And fill of confusion. I hope coach can help, even just as an easy. It is important for a boy to have someone he can trust. I'm also hoping he can find a balance with his need and makes things up to Mark and Sammy do they don't feel avoided or used. While the motivation is clear, it breaks my heart that poor Mark is left feeling lonely and avoided. And that dear Sammy feels betrayed and unloved. With luck, coach can get our boys had clear and he can mend some fences.

9/1/22, 1:17 PM
@Evan Well said & I feel the same. Luke has his issues but he must make it right to those who have a clear relationship with him. Friends are treasures & he needs to realize that and mend fences.
9/1/22, 1:13 PM
I really enjoyed this script. It was like watching a paid infomercial. I can't wait for the next part. I want a demonstration of the throat cock. Cocknose made me chuckle. :) Thanks.
9/1/22, 12:47 PM
I loved it. Such a mysterious world you have created and I'm excited for the next parts!
9/1/22, 11:14 AM
Amazing news