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Anonymous
8/17/22, 11:59 PM
The Prince’s allies should be changed in the next chapter, I hope that you can change them to be younger or dumper.

8/18/22, 12:01 AM
@ I'll see what I can do there ;)

Anonymous
8/18/22, 4:47 PM
@BlazargusI like your story very much, so keep going!!!
8/18/22, 2:51 PM
Mpreg definitely!
Boomer
8/18/22, 1:03 PM
Please don't listen to the folks complaining about how dark it is. This was awesome and ticked so many boxes for me There are tons of more wholesome/softer mind control and transformation stories, but this one is serious, dark and horny as fuck. The villain winning is amazing, and the betrayal is hot as fuck

8/18/22, 1:47 PM
@Boomer Thank you so much! My personal tastes are all over the place; I draw the lines at some things, but I'm a big fan of both light and fun MC stories and full blown dark ones. I'm peeved by cop-out endings where everything just falls back into place, unless they're well set up. That said, I'm going to risk muddying the waters here and post a sequel which continues the story (despite not having planned to do so originally). It won't end quite so bleakly (only in a relative sense), but it should be a happy medium between brutally dark and warm and fuzzy. Hope it still lives up to your expectations!
NeNekoKun
8/18/22, 2:14 AM
I really liked this story. All Aren and Hugh's corruption was so well constructed. I was just kind of sad about what happened in the end, but in a twisted way, Aren and Hugh are together and will be able to stay that way for eternity.

8/18/22, 1:37 PM
@NeNekoKun Thanks for the praise! I think as far as this being originally intended as a one-shot goes, the dark ending was almost a must if the world was going to "continue on" after the close of the story.
8/18/22, 1:53 AM
Superb. The manipulation of titles or true names is the oldest of magics, and you did them justice in a truly desperate yet highly erotic story. Hugh probably deserved better, yes, but the ending demanded this to truly break and corrupt the hero. Kudos!

8/18/22, 1:34 PM
@Essex Thank you! It's reassuring to hear this!
4/21/22, 9:37 PM
Had lots of conflicting feelings reading this excellent story. I felt bad for Hank, I felt like he was being done dirty. But forced to consider that while he was protecting Corey, he wasn't offering him what he needed either. He wanted to be Corey's friend, and ultimately he did still get to remain friends with him. Jason was certainly a "predator" in the context of the gym culture, but despite being a bit of a dick at times his internal monologue showed that he was reflective and caring (although more domineering than what we would accept in real life). And he was insanely hot. Just drool-inducingly hot. Really, he wouldn't need hypnotic musk to seduce most gay men but the musk just made him that much of a hotter character. I agree with Martin though that this story could have included a seriously amazing rimming scene if you'd wanted to include it and had written it in the style that you used. Something to put into your next story, maybe? I would certainly be down for another visit to this gym, perhaps with different characters next time since it really did feel like Corey and Jason are very happy and well-suited to one another and probably lacking in the necessary conflict to drive a second outing for them.

4/22/22, 5:32 AM
@amul Same here about conflicting feelings. I personally felt like Hank was falling in love with Corey, and wanting to not rush things because he didn't want to take advantage of him.

4/27/22, 7:11 AM
@amul Thank you so much for the kind comment! I took into consideration your and Martin's ideas and we're going to have a sequel to this, don't you worry!

4/27/22, 9:11 AM
@TaylorGuy I'm sorry haha, I didn't expect people to care too much about Hank. I may be a bit too unfair with the poor guy :p

8/18/22, 12:29 PM
@Twan Andersen Super late reply but that's fair haha! Maybe in the future you could do something to make it up to poor Hank by having him find another love! Or if you ever do a third chapter to this, he could end up being in a relationship with Corey and Jason, because Jason starts to mellow out and change due to Corey's influence on him and he realizes that it Hank had fell in love with Corey and had just been trying to protect him from being taken advantage of by predators like how he once was, and he feels guilty about his actions and gives Corey the opportunity to leave him or whatever Corey decides, and Corey decides that he wants to be with Jason, and Hank, but that otherwise he wants to be monogamous with them? Idk, I'm a sucker for emotional pain and turmoil that still has a happy ending, even if that rarely happens in the stories I like. I have a bad tendency to want to write my own expansions or endings to other people's stories, which is, imo, disrespectful to the original author unless they grant permission to do so, and even then I'd probably feel bad because I would probably undo half of the effects their stories had lol. Editing to say that I just skim-read the second chapter and (I mean this respectfully) damn you for doing Hank dirty again! Poor guy, I feel even worse for him now because he starts to move on from Corey only to have someone else taken from him. At that point if I was Hank I'd be distraught and probably broken emotionally, and just give up on trying to form a relationship with anyone, or even friendships because it seems like nobody actually cares for Hank even as a friend. Honestly, if I was Hank and had went through all of that, I'd probably be tempted to just throw myself off a bridge or something lol.
8/14/22, 5:05 PM
Usually I'd be worried we're heading towards a story with a bad ending, but in you I have a complete faith that the ending will not only be magnificent and hot, but truly happy and possibly heartwarming.

8/18/22, 12:16 PM
@Reader I agree with you that I'd normally be worried that this was on a path that leads to Luis and Mateo becoming essentially brain dead jocks under the control of Phil that are barely capable of breathing on their own. But given this authors other works, I have some faith that the end will (hopefully!) be a happy one where Luis and Mateo are able to regain their lost intelligence and some of their old personalities, maybe even become smarter than they were before, and still retain their new bodies. But that's just my personal hope haha.
Jul 13, 2022
8/18/22, 12:09 PM
Is this going to be a series or a one-off? Because I personally would be interested if it became a series. That being said, the story overall leaves me conflicted because it's hot, and I love how quickly Aiden managed to break Steve, but then at the end he showed tenderness to Steve that could be an opening for a more equal, loving relationship between them. On the other hand, if I was Steve I'd probably off myself after all of that had occurred to me haha.