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8/18/22, 12:01 PM
Ok this is starting to get interesting, and also looks like it has the potential to spiral out of control and leave everyone hurt, which in itself isn't neccessarily a bad thing. Maybe the jock can help all of them get back to normal and lift the curse on Bryan and Max? I just hope that Nick and Max's relationship can withstand all of this and that it brings them closer in the end! And that Bryan faces some sort of karma for what he did in the last chapter.
Marky
8/18/22, 11:57 AM
Fantástic máx. Thanks a lot for your relate. Marky is a forced whore, but maybe could be forced to be a real gay, I mean be forced to fuck a en, also ugly and old Men...
8/18/22, 11:54 AM
I like where this is going so far! Makes me excited to see how the rest of the week goes. But it also makes me wonder about what sort of repercussions all of this will have for Ben and Landon, mentally, emotionally and physically, and how it could end up effecting their relationship.
Aug 13, 2022
8/18/22, 11:50 AM
I love this, even if it's something that I personally had trouble reading because of the older brothers name haha. I love how Junior ends up making his brother behave better and be his lover and protecter! Personally if I was to continue this, I'd probably do it to where overtime the hypnosis wears off and it comes out that his brother has always harbored feelings of love and lust towards him, and that his previously shitty behavior was his way of trying to repress those feelings. That or, considering how strong the hypnosis was, have Junior push things and discover that the hypnosis was powerful enough to where it can cause physical changes to his brother!
8/18/22, 8:55 AM
Bears Youngbuck! ♥️ This is a super story so far, keep the chapters cumming. I usually don't read noire detective fiction, though I've grown to like the genre thanks to themed episodes of shows like Charmed, Legends of Tomorrow, Bones, etc. You've got all this lingo that the detective uses in his narration. And the world building is so fun to discover, I want to go apartment hunting in the Dickstricts.
8/17/22, 3:09 PM
this story could be good but it lacks character descriptions and background

Charles
8/17/22, 9:59 PM
@ZackF Thanks for the comment. It was intended to be a first-person point of view diary style entry. More about the process and the journey than the personalities.

8/17/22, 10:18 PM
@Charles May I ask how old the characters are and their body type? Also, was charles served in the military?

8/18/22, 1:17 AM
@ZackF Carl 50'ish 5'10" close cropped grey hair, mustache, moderate paunch, insurance sales Charles 70'ish 6'2" 187 curly grey hair, aerobic fit (as opposed to weight lifting. He served in the military, active for 8 years, then reserves. Now a VP for operations for a logistics company.

8/18/22, 7:29 AM
@Charles Thank you for this. This story just gotten hotter. I like big submissive Daddy
8/18/22, 6:51 AM
I'm very intrigued to see where the different paths lead.
Anonymous
8/18/22, 3:58 AM
This was incredibly hot!! Thank you for writing a fantasy transformation story like this one.
8/18/22, 2:36 AM
More fun escalation! Great work with this chapter -- it's fun to see these big shifts as they happen, built up from the foundations of those tiny shifts and details at the start!
8/17/22, 11:24 PM
Nice story. Looking forward for the next chapter

8/17/22, 11:38 PM
@Rocky Thanks! I'm debating what to do with the story right now, but I'm looking into it.