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8/17/22, 3:37 PM
Holy shit this was hot
8/17/22, 2:44 PM
Omg the slow burn that I didn’t know I needed. The wait was definitely worth it. love it!

8/17/22, 3:07 PM
@Curious53 That's awesome! Also thank you for reminding me that I meant to tag it slow burn. 😅
Anonymous
8/17/22, 2:53 PM
This will be the canonical ending for me, super hot. And now I want to see what happens when Jared returns all those years later!
8/17/22, 2:41 PM
Super sexy and awesome! Love this ending! Will consider it to be the official ending. hehe I think that this is a much nicer result for Connor and Trevor and Russel and the others. I also thing the events here help explain Jared's anger and rage and such. So yeah, sexy, fun, awesome. Love the buttplay and while there can always be more of it the amount here is fun and enjoyable. Thank you for writing this and I am glad you had fun too!
Anonymous
8/17/22, 12:47 PM
This is both hot and delightful! I hope this more character-rich addition means you've found some inspiration; it has always left me itching for more. Now that you've tossed so many interesting plates in the air I can't wait to see where you take it. Very hot, very charming. Love the parallel of Jack thinking Finn outclasses his avatar, and Finn thinking Jack is the bigger stud in-game. Rada's "intimidating roommate" act is also interestingly subtle. Give all these nerds get a happy ending!

8/17/22, 1:34 PM
Thanks. I'm glad you found all of those things interesting!
Iriefal
8/17/22, 11:39 AM
Woow, just woow Love it, pls never give up on this story. I like how Rama is slightly jealous and how the story progress. Normally I prefer dominant smaller guys, as I myself am switch, but damn, description from jack side was very well written as from the other side was magic enhanced, so not really counted in. It is just my suggestion but please don't make it love triangle where Rama and Finn fight with each other, make it threesome manage and make everyone in the story happy🙏🥰

8/17/22, 1:33 PM
@Iriefal Thanks for reading this huge story segment. I really thought about splitting it in half to make it more manageable. I'm glad you enjoyed it though. 😌
8/16/22, 8:11 PM
Wow - this was great! I really enjoyed it.

8/17/22, 12:08 PM
@stimle Cheers! I'm glad you liked it! I appreciate the kind words!
8/17/22, 11:52 AM
Very nice. Can I have the cowboy back too?
8/17/22, 8:30 AM
What can I say, I'm a sucker for a good ending. The sex scenes where hot as usual and I think it was a very interesting way to develop the lore of the tribe and the lore of DubCon Corp. It also showed a great deal of Jared's personality, proving that he always had ill intentions, so it wasn't caused by the transformation mental change while also showing his will power and setting his way to villainy. In some ways I think this ending can explain Jared's need of a manly son and his insistence on humiliating others and exploiting them. One thing I should mention is that I think you have a misspelling in one of the lines: "He realised that he could cum anytime he wanted, that the Wiraqocha did not need to fuck for as long as they did, but they simply ++**embarrassed**++ the pleasure of doing what came naturally to them". I think you meant to say embraced instead of embarrassed. But that's not a biggy.

8/17/22, 9:38 AM
@Reader thanks :) While I enjoy Jared's original journey to becoming Mr Booker, I think this humiliation and set-back is really the catalyst that turns him from jerk to full villain, and deepens why he is obsessed with masculinity and dom/sub roles. Thank you for mentioning, fixed it :)
8/17/22, 5:28 AM
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