Recent Comments

8/11/22, 7:27 AM
I think there is a foundation for a good story here, for a first story it's solid for sure! I think the transformation idea, a towel at the gym is really good. My biggest critique is grammar, some of the sentences are a bit long and more difficult to read, and a few commas would help to break that up. Welcome to the site and i look forward to seeing more of your work!

8/11/22, 12:46 PM
Thank you for your input
8/11/22, 12:45 PM
Damn so hot. Great chapter! Can’t wait to see what happens to James.
8/11/22, 12:10 PM
i am a total musk guy... all man smells. I love them. So, this story completely made me crazy-horny! I loved it. I wanted to smell Scott so badly! thank you for the writing. I loved it. MORE musk - man smell stories.

8/11/22, 12:40 PM
@MChicago just you wait I’ve got something else I’m thinking of/in the works I’m sure you’ll love
8/11/22, 9:52 AM
looking forward to ...
8/11/22, 9:52 AM
great thing
8/11/22, 1:36 AM
I'm not into puppy play at all but this story was sweet and very telling about appearance and the judgemental but too short. I wanted to see more about their physical presence and Benji's transformation into the pup he was. Why did the mask burn? Was it a transformation? This had me imagining all of the possibiities. very sexy and sweet! 5 stars all around. I too would love to read more about their relationship and roles and hopefully finding they need each other!

8/11/22, 9:22 AM
@Stroppy Author Thank you for all the feedback! I was thinking, maybe I should make a chapter where Benji has to go to the center to get a health check-up or something, so David goes on a tour over the facility, that way I can describe the changes more. What do you think?
8/11/22, 7:47 AM
Intrigued to see where this story is going. I love a gradual shift!
8/11/22, 4:57 AM
This is so hot thanks for writing
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8/11/22, 3:18 AM
This story hit the spot. Thank you.
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8/11/22, 3:08 AM
Excellent erotic writing as always, Ventage.