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7/22/22, 3:15 PM
Holy shit that was incredibly hot! The arc of the scene was really well drawn, from resisting to submitting, each stage was super hot

Evan
7/22/22, 11:28 PM
@Bound_Up_Boy Thank you! Thank you, too, for commenting. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story and that it perhaps pushed some of your buttons.
7/22/22, 2:30 PM
What I especially love about this story is how inexorable all the other characters know that it is, and how Phil seems to find that fascinating. I love Cho for his firm kindness and Cortez for how he contrasts that. My favourite line from Cortez is him sadistically declaring his love for bathtime while he sprays them down. And then there's the lore!!! I love the language you've chosen -- battery pack, amp, and so on, and how much it evokes. I would love to read more stories set in this universe! Thank you so much!

Evan
7/22/22, 11:27 PM
@time.to.occur Thank you. Your encouragement and kindness helped make this a finished story and far more polished than it ever would have been. I think Phil, like all of them at one point, were fascinated by the expectation of the inexorable nature of it. That the others had to put effort in to remember his point of view, being new to it all. Every new arrival probably finds that strange. Every new arrival believes that the cellmates are all wrong. They will be the exception. They'll put up with what they must and be on their way unchanged. They are always wrong. I enjoy the bath time line too. It's when we see Cortez at his happiest, I think. If I write more stories in this universe, then I promise to share.
7/22/22, 10:37 PM
In my personal opinion, it would be interesting to define a definitive style and not have to read two versions or modified versions of the previous ones.

7/22/22, 11:23 PM
@Maxigay I can understand this. I grew up in the 80's and a big style of book I read growing up were these small "choose your own adventure" style of book and at the end of a page it would say Go to Page # to do this... or page # to do that. This is something like that. What I can tell you though is that if you picture this as a flow chart, everything from 1 is going to be "willing" and everything derived from 2 is forced, the further you go "to the right" will be more forced and vice versa. So higher letters are more forced, A and B more willing. I hope you've been able to enjoy the story either way and thank you for the feedback.
7/22/22, 8:23 PM
Finally getting around to this series! I enjoyed chapter 1 — very hot, and great worldbuilding. You’ve got a good knack for putting the reader in the sensory experience of the characters, which I really respond positively to. I look forward to seeing what’s up with the prince, as well as seeing how you work Talley into the story. I am curious though. How do Seeded guys get anything done, like, say, studying and keeping up their grades, when they’re constantly in heat?

7/22/22, 11:04 PM
Thanks for reading! I’m glad the prose is really helping you dive into the character experience. That was a big thing I wanted to get done in this story, which highlights the sexual powers so much. Seeded guys are not in heat constantly—heats rise and fall, and also build in intensity over time. Additionally, post nut clarity is extra powerful when you’re pregnant, no time more so than right after a heat is satisfied or a contraction completes, so you can get high levels of productivity. And as it happens, although it seems counterintuitive, you soak up knowledge from a teacher when you’re having sex in the classroom… at least, those are all the solutions I’ve posed to myself. Maybe we’ll have to brainstorm some time about the best ones. @Noam de Pluma
7/22/22, 6:12 PM
Ooh, what a fantastic tale! Ever since I read dear absman’s “Pollination,” I’ve been fascinated by fellating flowers. :p The descriptions are red-hot, and the idea of being reduced to a brainless zombie via orgasming is a phenomenal idea. And I’ll bet you a pizza that this Amazonian tribe is the same one that featured at the end of the last story! :D Love how you weave your universe together. :)

7/22/22, 11:00 PM
@Feed Your Head I owe you a pizza :)
7/22/22, 9:53 PM
Damn, very nice story… I can feel the pull…

7/22/22, 10:28 PM
@HudsonUK2 Thanks! The Spiral definitely has a way of making you crave that uniform…
7/22/22, 10:05 PM
Curious if your continuing part 3 or giving it an end as the original part 3 just abruptly ended but seemed like there was more to come. I also like the changes here especially with the Cole character who decided not to just play along with a random outfit that showed up but rather question it and attempt a confrontation. Also like how the outfit is all suddenly there from the start and not something that randomly showed up in chapter 3 like with the bowties and pomade. That said I don't like the fact he gave him a chance to back out but the thing around here seems to be consent even if they're not in the right state of mind. Also there was a part where you aknowledged the suspenders are there and your belts were missing but later on you still had the original line where your belt magically turned into suspenders.

7/22/22, 10:27 PM
@nerdysuitedbaby Thanks for the feedback! I’m taking a slightly more realistic approach (our slaves in the next part are actually going to buy uniform clothing for conversions and it’s not going to keep magically showing up). The reason I gave Cole a chance to back out was to show how eager he was to willingly submit and I thought that made things really hot. And thanks for pointing out the typo; I’ve got an edit pending. PM me on the forum if you want to talk more! I’ll most likely continue after part 3 — depends on what @New Guy in Town writes for his “Change of Attire” series. We’ve been messaging back and forth and coordinating the flow of events together. I’ll definitely add more to this universe in whatever format keeps things consistent (side story during the Cordz, after part 3 and in between Change of Attire, or after Change of Attire, etc.).
7/22/22, 9:25 PM
The buildup was good, but 3 sentences of the sex was a bit of a downer, longer sex scenes would make it better
7/22/22, 8:25 PM
a great ending to a great series , im glad Marcus decided not to take the antidote and remain as he is . keep up the good writing GoonNoob
Oct 30, 2021
Thom
7/22/22, 6:10 PM
Hi there 👋 and thank you for your message. I actually read that very story today as well and loved it. I located your story site through the link you had provided here and added it to my home screen. I just re-read The Spirit of the Bear, which is a story that I truly loved from the first time I read it years ago. 🐻

7/22/22, 6:38 PM
@Thom That's going Waaaaaaaaay back. LOL Glad you found it again.

Anonymous
7/22/22, 6:49 PM
@Papa Werebear Me too. I am looking forward to re-visiting some of your stories and reading your newer ones too.

7/22/22, 7:14 PM
@ Heh... I need to get some new Chad out.