Recent Comments

6/28/22, 4:53 PM
Not dead, didn't forget you. Just busy with a new job, a new boy, and such things. I have sent the next chapter to my editor and once that good boy is finished, I'll be posting. I know it's a wait, it's a long story I'm wanting to do for you, as we find things to do to poor Marky.

Daddiesdaddy
7/17/22, 4:33 AM
@Max Potter some leather training. Chastity phone activated vibrating electro plugs
Marky
5/7/22, 2:34 PM
Max Potter has forgotten us

Daddiesdaddy
7/17/22, 4:30 AM
He is writing his books and this story will just continue the same suffering for the MC with no revenge or escape
Anonymous
9/23/21, 10:37 AM
I'd like to see this start transitioning into his escape/revenge. Another slave would also be

JollyJerk
11/28/21, 8:50 AM
@Anonymous Yeah, I agree. Could personally do with less of the farting etc but hey, each to their own. Ain't gonna yuck someone else's yum.

Anonymous
7/17/22, 4:28 AM
@the author said never going to happen..continued suffering, no escape
Newcub45
7/16/22, 11:22 PM
I love this! Curious to see where it will go!
7/16/22, 10:22 PM
I nearly busted a nut in my own cage when Marcus was caged (and I hope he stays that way), but Mr. Booker is kind of a dick. I hope he doesn’t corrupt the boys too much.
7/16/22, 7:21 AM
I really hope they are going to reflect about what happened in this chapter and work through it... I really dont want to see them break apart. which is kind of funny because a few chapters ago I was still rooting for marcus to free himself to make them pay and suffer. Come to think of it I still want them to see the "error of their ways" so to speak. How they basically enslaved their best friend against his will, manipulated him and now it happened to them. My romantic heart really wants to see them giving Marcus the choice of leaving and him choosing to stay with them - not because they made him but because that is what he wants.

Anonymous
7/16/22, 9:29 AM
@billi still can't get over it how they aboided eye contact. Just makes my heart ache for Marcus. It was their duty to protect him and they failed.

7/16/22, 10:00 AM
@ to be fair, they had just been unknowingly drugged into topping so they were rightly ashamed of themselves

7/16/22, 10:01 AM
@billi I think you will like the last chapter then :)

easdf
7/16/22, 10:53 AM
@billi I agree with both of these comments. I feel like at the start of the chapter there was a change from a slave to a full on boyfriend (for example they also participate in the chores, and if Marcus plays the "you drugged me" card that means that they are ashamed of themselves, which I liked. As for the eye contact, on the one hand I just assumed they are still somewhat high enough to not recognize the situation (plus it seems that Brook hid Marcus), but the fact that they didn't insist at any part that Marcus will be treated as equal nor felt like they shouldn't leave him alone was a bit disappointing (but totally makes sense since otherwise there won't be any plot)

Anon from before
7/16/22, 2:10 PM
@GoonNoob I get that they were ashamed. But should their shame not take a backseat to the fact that their "Equal boyfriend" was just used by their father/father in law? I just feel for Marcus. All he has as protection against dominant alpha men are his boyfriends bc they made him into a total slut. They should be ashamed yes but seeing their bf turned into a caged sex toy should outrage them... at least if they really care for him and not just want to use him.

7/16/22, 2:29 PM
@GoonNoob the next chapter or the last chapter? :smiley:

7/16/22, 2:58 PM
@Anon from before. If it wasn't clear from the story, D&X didn't see Booker have sex with Marcus. Or at least they can't process it yet. Consider what they experienced as being "roofied" but with them doing the fucking. When they wake up, things will be a lot clearer and they'll show M they care for him.

7/16/22, 3:01 PM
@billi both. Decided to wrap this up by combining the last 2 chapters, mostly because the first is very sex based and the second is story and I want to balance it out, but also I've learned that while stories like this with struggles and grim cliffhangers work when u can immediately turn the page and keep going, where readers have to wait a few days, I can sense it leaving a sour taste in ppls mouths.

7/16/22, 4:17 PM
@GoonNoob I can see that. When I read a book the best parts for me are usually the "sour drops". It just has such an innate boost to it when the protagonist overcomes an obstacle but when it is left of with a sour note it can carry a while. Its jsut like with baking. A chocolate chip cooky tastes much better with some salt sprinkled on top. I personally read the story this morning and had to think about it all day. I am just a hopeless romantic. I want everyone to be happy and that love and friendship overcomes all.

7/16/22, 5:57 PM
@billi I think i've realised writing different series that I'm also a hopeless romantic. There is just something very erotic about two (or three) guys placed in hopeless situations and they only have themselves for comfort.

7/16/22, 7:08 PM
@GoonNoob I dont know if you read it but a few weeks ago there was a series here "The Promise Breakers' Society" which had the same thing. One being drugged up and betraying the other and that was how the chapter ended. It made me so sad not because of one betraying the other (I mean yes of course because of that too) but because it gave me the feeling of an unhappy ending. As a reader you can only guess what happens but in the end you are at the mercy of the writer. But such cliffhangers leave me personally really worried that we are heading into misery for the chracacters we learned to love.

Anonymous
7/16/22, 10:19 PM
@GoonNoob To be fair, only one of them is placed in a hopeless situation while the other two are the ones who put him there. Even if now they see him as an equal, they left him at the clutches of Booker and didn't even blink when he insisted on treating Marcus as a toy
StatueLover
7/16/22, 9:01 PM
Fucking Brilliant!
7/16/22, 8:38 AM
Maybe it was explained in the original story, but how did the spiral only intervene for Adam? Still, very hot.

7/16/22, 1:36 PM
@BobbyBlobfish The original story does have the Spiral intervening to make Cole his first and head slave. i'm paralleling that but making it grounded in the fact that Adam is actually holding Cole in a choke hold and Cole can't do anything.

7/16/22, 7:57 PM
@New Guy in Town Okay. Thanks! because I was wondering WHY did Adam had more personnality than most of the other slaves and had a symbiotic dynamic rather than a master/slave. I guess The Spiral acted in a panic and put more of himself than usual in the brainwashing process. Will read the original. Seems interesting.

7/16/22, 8:01 PM
Read the first chapter. okay. Makes a lot more sense now? Definitively different methods of control.
7/16/22, 6:49 PM
Such a good series!
7/16/22, 11:01 AM
That was a really interesting chapter! At some stages I wondered if I regretted opting for more chapters, but as long as there will be a true happy ending (and there better be) I'm with you. I saw someone comment on the chastity cage, and I agreed that I want it off but I must admit that it's not only that I want him to be equal and free of Brook's manipulation but also chastity is less my thing. Having said that, I think it would be strange that they'll keep the cage which was added purely as a domination tool and then claim he is equal to them. The two things that bothered me was that X&D didn't think it's unwise to leave Marcus alone with a person who has the tools and the intention to make Marcus a slave and that Marcus didn't think that it's dangerous to take a joint for the exact same reason. But once again, I guess that otherwise there wouldn't have been any plot. So to sum up; X&D still need to prove themselves and make up, Marcus is precious and Brooks need to be taken down asap. I can't wait for the next chapter though I hope there won't be a lot more heartbreaking moments before the happy ending!

7/16/22, 3:08 PM
@Reader if you've read a few of my series, you'll see that while those effected by a brain alteration let their experience guide their future, they're not _necessarily_ still under the influence. So while they might make choices about their freedom, its left vague if they would've chosen the same if they he never gone through their trials.

7/16/22, 5:36 PM
@GoonNoob Just realized I wrote brook instead of Booker. Oops. In my defense I was pretty horny and wasn't thinking clearly. BTW I'm curious to know how you chose the name for that tribe. Like, do they have a meaning/based on some other words? I want to say that the Ansu Sisa resembles sissy anus but I don't want to make assumptions

7/16/22, 5:50 PM
@Reader they're based on actual South American tribe languages, which will give you a hint to the next series I'm writing at the moment, that goes into the 90's incident. Wiraqocha comes from the word 'man' and Ansu Sisa loosely translates as Ass Flower.