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7/15/22, 8:55 PM
Scary! I love it!
7/15/22, 8:25 PM
Good moocows!
7/15/22, 7:26 PM
Oh, it's you. I find your work so bittersweet. I hope you make more of your work available here. If you're honoring the policy of the site about its copyright policy, then I definitely know who you are. I am curious of why you chose this story instead of making a new one for the "toxic masculinity" contest?
7/15/22, 7:26 PM
So hard.... Holy shit this was such a great quick read
7/15/22, 7:19 PM
Please, continue!
7/15/22, 7:19 PM
Love this series! I was so excited to see another entry had posted.
7/15/22, 2:53 PM
Wow, I can’t believe someone wrote a spiritual sequel to a story I posted years ago (way before I made an account on here)! This brought back some good memories. I went back and read my 8-year-old original work and wow - your writing blows mine out of the water! I’d be more than interested to see you continue this story and what your interpretation of it is like. I wonder how Adam and the rest are going carry out the Spiral’s plans. Maybe they’re going to target a few school clubs/teams first, then work their way up to the entire school? Getting a teacher on their side might help their cause. It’s interesting to see a serial recruitment story from the perspective of the perpetrators - our antagonists might be a group of Spiral holdouts. Again, I’m pleasantly surprised. This is awesome!

7/15/22, 3:48 PM
@jockboy51 where's your original piece?

7/15/22, 3:55 PM
@ConversionEnthusiast You can find it by searching for “The Cordz”. It’s in 3 parts. It’s a little rough, but still enjoyable if you’re into this kind of stuff.

7/15/22, 6:43 PM
@jockboy51 Thank you for commenting and writing the Cordz. It slowly grew on me; I think the appeal of the slaves in clothing and a uniform is what drew me to it. I think the images from your original story playing in Adam's mind are a bit of myself and the times I have enjoyed the story. I've expanded the universe of your work to include another story idea I have so there's a lot in store, but your ideal for antagonists to the Spiral may be another high school where the Spiral is beginning to make inroads. The next section will have another homage to your work in the final scene. I'm so glad that you like the work that I'm doing; feel free to let me know any thoughts you have on things. I'll try my best to work them in.

7/15/22, 7:18 PM
@jockboy51 oh i didn't realize that was the post linked up top haha my bad
7/15/22, 3:12 PM
Wow, that was so hot. Loved the way they all came so much in their pants. I nearly did too!

7/15/22, 6:17 PM
@jakey Thanks for saying that; I appreciate that you like that part. I think of it as the Spiral making all three cum so that Cole's cum can get to Adam and start the conversion, if that helps.
7/15/22, 1:09 PM
Glad to see you back, mate! I hope the writing program got you back into a great mindset for writing but be sure to take breaks and such =) Looking forward to seeing more material from you. Our interests align very closely and I've always appreciated your stories! There are a few errors spell check wouldn't have caught but overall I loved this one!

7/15/22, 6:11 PM
@ConversionEnthusiast Thank you for the comments. I see a few things that you are pointing to; I did paste this in Word from Scrivener (the program that is helping me produce) but I didn't do the Read Aloud in Word. So your comment reminds me that I still need to do that. But thank you for your support; I'm glad to have readers like you supporting the work and making their support known.