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boi98229
7/14/22, 7:04 AM
I really like the very hot premise for the story, but I felt like it moved too fast. I would have liked a lot more detail about Jack's growing suspicion and the growing mind control training by Steve. For example, why not have Steve invite his new colleague, Preston, over for dinner a time or two, then a pool party, etc. to allow some relationship development to happen directly with all three players. Also might it not have been more fun if the mind control training had progressed to the point where Steve, or better yet even, Preston, could use already well trained triggers to demonstrate the level of mind control already established to Jack. A trigger which would cause Jack to lose the ability the ability to think clearly or speak as a human, and feel more natural and comfortable communicating as a dog could be fun. He might be still aware of this shift in himself but be unable think clearly enough to do anything about it. Instead of having trained Jack simply to reduce jealousy, why not train Jack to respond to a trigger to replace the jealousy with a puppy-like devotion to both Masters. I didn't think Jack's suspicion had advanced enough to force this outcome. It seemed too rushed. Still, I did enjoy the story, and there is so much untapped potential.
Charlie
7/13/22, 7:57 PM
There's one paragraph repeated twice, sloppy editing.

7/14/22, 5:58 AM
@Charlie two different endings sharing the same preamble, intentional in this case.
7/14/22, 5:23 AM
Very good and what I like: as close to real life as possible:sunglasses:
Ng5
7/14/22, 4:47 AM
amazingly hot
Anonymous
7/14/22, 3:46 AM
Terrific story, thanks!
7/14/22, 3:30 AM
Wow karma really came down hard, huh?
nycboot
7/14/22, 2:26 AM
Wow what a story. Do I understand correctly that Steven essentially was going to prompt the others to do away with Johannes? That seems to be the implication.

7/14/22, 3:00 AM
@nycboot 😬🤐🤭 let’s just say I ended it there to let the imagination of the reader take it where they wanted
7/13/22, 10:03 PM
That. Was. Insane. Perfect. Crazy. Wonderful! This story has been one of my faves since the single entry of the first I think years ago. What an amazing arc of the story! The gravitas is perfectly satisfied. The larry fans see that Larry gets Zack again, and the readers who reveled in the immoral debauchary have that continued in Steven. Pryer achieves his life's utmost fantasy and gets the consolation of his conscience that he did everything that he could to try and give steven back what Pryer took from him. Thats going to crash and burn when he checks for the safe and it will be gone, but thats not a concern for Steven any longer. The balance of justice, vice, and romance was superb. I cannot praise your talent enough. If you find any reason to revisit this story again in future years, i will rejoice. Thank you. Thank you for this story.

7/14/22, 2:59 AM
@Mind Labyrinth what an amazing review! Thank you so much for your kind words 🥰 ultimately, my goal with the story was to explore absolute power and how quickly it can end up turning on you…no matter how careful you think you’re being.
Jul 13, 2022
Evan
7/14/22, 2:02 AM
The idea that Aiden opened up Scott while he was unconscious to help him take his dick and lubed him is actually pretty hot. And makes the pleasure as a tool to dominate him and have a cock in him all the better. No pain to highlight any resistance or doubts.