Recent Comments

7/14/22, 12:17 PM
REALLY LOVE your story. It's AMAZING !!!!!
7/14/22, 11:25 AM
Great start! Looking forward to more!!!
7/14/22, 11:15 AM
Really loved this beginning! Hope we'll see Jack go even deeper down the rabbit hole!
Andrew
7/14/22, 9:19 AM
Putting my money on Victor finally prospering and you can throw me to Mr Grey and his helpers if I'm wrong! Really love this series, it's such a good idea.
7/14/22, 7:19 AM
Love it! Can't wait for the rest
boi98229
7/14/22, 7:04 AM
I really like the very hot premise for the story, but I felt like it moved too fast. I would have liked a lot more detail about Jack's growing suspicion and the growing mind control training by Steve. For example, why not have Steve invite his new colleague, Preston, over for dinner a time or two, then a pool party, etc. to allow some relationship development to happen directly with all three players. Also might it not have been more fun if the mind control training had progressed to the point where Steve, or better yet even, Preston, could use already well trained triggers to demonstrate the level of mind control already established to Jack. A trigger which would cause Jack to lose the ability the ability to think clearly or speak as a human, and feel more natural and comfortable communicating as a dog could be fun. He might be still aware of this shift in himself but be unable think clearly enough to do anything about it. Instead of having trained Jack simply to reduce jealousy, why not train Jack to respond to a trigger to replace the jealousy with a puppy-like devotion to both Masters. I didn't think Jack's suspicion had advanced enough to force this outcome. It seemed too rushed. Still, I did enjoy the story, and there is so much untapped potential.
Charlie
7/13/22, 7:57 PM
There's one paragraph repeated twice, sloppy editing.

7/14/22, 5:58 AM
@Charlie two different endings sharing the same preamble, intentional in this case.
7/14/22, 5:23 AM
Very good and what I like: as close to real life as possible:sunglasses:
Ng5
7/14/22, 4:47 AM
amazingly hot
Anonymous
7/14/22, 3:46 AM
Terrific story, thanks!