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7/3/22, 9:00 PM
Chastity inflicted by a symbiont is an interesting angle that I don't think I've seen before.
7/3/22, 8:52 PM
Looking forward to the rest. When he was getting hard, so was I. Thanks
7/3/22, 8:47 PM
This is a fun and hot story, with so many chances to burst alongside the characters, definitely gonna revisit
Jul 3, 2022
7/3/22, 5:45 PM
Pretty darned good for a first story, with an interesting premise and some vivid descriptions of sex. I did have a writing suggestion for you, however. When doing a revenge story like this one, it's a good idea to spend a little more time on character set-up so that the reader feels the revenge is warranted and karmically satisfying. You do tell us a bit about how Kyle perceives Dean as a homophobic "arrogant asshole," but the revenge element might be more satisfying if you actually showed Dean behaving in this way towards Kyle.

7/3/22, 7:43 PM
@Hypnothrill You’re totally right. I knew it needed some character and story development in that area -- for the story’s flow as much as the revenge set up. I was worried I would push off publishing my first story because it wasn’t “perfect” again; so… I bit my lip, accepted its imperfection, and just hit publish.
7/3/22, 7:26 PM
I think this is my favorite story for this contest. You really nailed the theme of toxic masculine predators getting what they deserve. I hope you consider following up on this.
7/3/22, 7:13 PM
an exceptional faery tale. You do need to format it for easier reading but well done. Looking forward to more!!
7/3/22, 7:02 PM
So so so good!!!!
7/3/22, 6:41 PM
Great setup! Love the old-timy detective approach and the fact that there's a Himbotown, a place I hope we'll be visiting a lot. Great job on the himbo too! Can't wait to see what develops and the himbos we see along the way.
7/3/22, 6:37 PM
Such a great story! I love how Jese is aware and yet can't stop himself from wanting it all. How easily David got into his mind from that first interaction. Nice red hearing with the cameraman, the whole scene on the car, with Jese becoming more and more aware that he is turning into one of David's pornstar sluts was ecellent. I was sad in the end that Jese would go back home. Hopefully he returns and brings back a friend. Or his housemate. Kudos Autodream, this was another amazing story that keeps me reading in batches to recuperate in between. Your #1 non stalker fan.
7/3/22, 5:26 PM
Such a great next chapter in one of my favorite series! 😉😵‍💫