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7/3/22, 9:24 PM
I liked this but I really needed the anal sex part to also completely be in this. I needed a little more material to wank to so I'm afraid I had to mark you down a little bit on that.
7/3/22, 9:23 PM
Well I got the reference so I had to make sure I understood it correctly haha. A satisfying short seduction.
7/3/22, 9:00 PM
Chastity inflicted by a symbiont is an interesting angle that I don't think I've seen before.
7/3/22, 8:52 PM
Looking forward to the rest. When he was getting hard, so was I. Thanks
7/3/22, 8:47 PM
This is a fun and hot story, with so many chances to burst alongside the characters, definitely gonna revisit
Jul 3, 2022
7/3/22, 5:45 PM
Pretty darned good for a first story, with an interesting premise and some vivid descriptions of sex. I did have a writing suggestion for you, however. When doing a revenge story like this one, it's a good idea to spend a little more time on character set-up so that the reader feels the revenge is warranted and karmically satisfying. You do tell us a bit about how Kyle perceives Dean as a homophobic "arrogant asshole," but the revenge element might be more satisfying if you actually showed Dean behaving in this way towards Kyle.

7/3/22, 7:43 PM
@Hypnothrill You’re totally right. I knew it needed some character and story development in that area -- for the story’s flow as much as the revenge set up. I was worried I would push off publishing my first story because it wasn’t “perfect” again; so… I bit my lip, accepted its imperfection, and just hit publish.
7/3/22, 7:26 PM
I think this is my favorite story for this contest. You really nailed the theme of toxic masculine predators getting what they deserve. I hope you consider following up on this.
7/3/22, 7:13 PM
an exceptional faery tale. You do need to format it for easier reading but well done. Looking forward to more!!
7/3/22, 7:02 PM
So so so good!!!!