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Drone unit 55 b/delta:
6/17/22, 9:16 AM
This story was amazing and thoroughly deserves a sequel which I will enjoy reading ! Only if Master let's me of course :
Jun 8, 2022
Titan
6/17/22, 8:21 AM
Very hot story. Love the way you describe the fattening process on the soon to be obese gentleman daddy.
6/16/22, 4:21 PM
For Tony's "buyer" it would be nice if it was shown he was not a monster. In the first chapter Marcus seems like a semi-decent guy with a fetish and now he's a psychopath.

6/16/22, 4:46 PM
@Frapsity I honestly see that. I cover both Marcus’s kind of ruthless nature and the reasons he acts that way sometimes down the line

6/16/22, 10:08 PM
@PuffDeamon I'm glad it's explained later! It seems like it goes beyond ruthless. He watched Tony involuntarily suffocating himself to near death without any emotions. A lack of empathy is one of the landmark symptoms of a sociopath/psychopath. I missed the line where Marcus feels sorry for Tony but that doesn't come across at all. That line seems like something you throw in so the narrator doesn't get added to a list of deviants the government monitors. This is what I meant by his buyer as not a monster: Scenario 1- where the buyer is a villain worthy of an Isekai anime or a Baron Harkonen analog. Scenario 2- he is a rich guy that gets off on "buying" slaves but treats them fairly. If scenario one is absolutely necessary for the story, then Marcus's empathy needs to be more clear. Like Tony was a test subject and needs to disappear, but he parlays with the buyer for slightly fairer treatment. In order to get Tony's "consent", coerced it may be, he takes care of a family member or dear friend of Tony's. If not even these are possible it should be explained why in some relatable way. Just my 2 cents for improving relatability and story immersion.

6/17/22, 8:16 AM
@Frapsity Thabk you, I love feedback and you make some excellent points. Reading it back i can see i didn’t flesh out Marcuss feelings on what he's doingit, mostly becaue i have such a clear view as to why, but his background doesn't get revealed until later, so i forgot the readers point of view would be that hes a monster. Spectator sees more of the game as they say.
6/17/22, 6:18 AM
Perhaps this was way too intense for me, I feel a little traumatized, but I suppose it means you narrated it exceptionally well, I read horror novels for fun but this scared me to a fundamental level, not sure why. I must congratulate you because it probably means this story is super good for the people who get off this. (Not trying to be disrespectful, but I felt I had to comment this)

6/17/22, 8:10 AM
@Kristalmaster Thank you for your feedback. I wanted to show Marcus's dark side, but i admit he takes it too far. I've gone through sh*t so i tend to lean dark. Next few chapters lightens up a bit i swear XD
6/17/22, 5:49 AM
I have to admit I was terrified reading this
Andy
6/17/22, 2:30 AM
Amazing! Would there be a second chapter? I would love to read about Sir turned into the office cock slut cumdump. Having him all dressed up in his fancy elegant smart city suits and getting fucked over hard would be incredibly HOT!!!
DWK
6/16/22, 11:07 PM
Great, hot story. I really enjoy your writing. Thanks.
6/16/22, 10:25 PM
This was too much fun!!
rwriter51
6/16/22, 10:08 PM
So much opportunity for the advancement of science. I wish there was more.
6/16/22, 6:54 PM
I am loving this story so far! Excellent concept, great characters and a really fun read. My one deal breaker will be that I NEED Marc and Sam to end up together. I'm ok waiting til close to the end, but I'm so in love with the sweet Marc now that I really need to see him end up happy!

6/16/22, 9:54 PM
@MicroModal Thanks! I have a lot of Marc planned for the next chapter.