Well I wonder if this chapter will be about Larry (since he was the main subject on the previous chapter) or Zachary (since I think is the one that actually got more corrupted oh the same chapter)... and now I know the answer. I really love this series... can't wait to see how this will end. Rooting for Mr. Prayer here :3 also I love to not need to wait a week until know what changes Mr. Prayer has for Benjamin ^ ^ :blue_heart: :blue_heart: :blue_heart:

I appreciate the author taking the time to write and post the story This last chapter unfortunately descended into a kind of morality play that drained whatever remaining tension and eroticism built up in the earlier chapters (and began to falter mid-way through). With essentially no agency or active role in anything, Brandon being purely a passive victim elicits less sympathy than he really should given his dire circumstances. As for Joe, at first I felt he read as an abusive boyfriend, but towards the end he was just a vessel for the author to pour contempt into and not a character that could be feared and hated as much as the author intended. Rather than being a fearsome sadist or dominant master, Joe relies entirely on the invincible technology of the collar which allows the author to portray him as an oblivious nincompoop while still absolving Brandon of any agency to escape, fight back or defend himself. This absolutely killed the story for me. If a sub is trapped in a horrible situation from which there is no escape, then I as the reader expect the villain holding him to be smart, competent, powerful - something that justifies the situation. Instead this is off-loaded to an inanimate object and the result is deflating to the story. The resolution is unsatisfying and feels unearned. When Brandon was told about "The Resistance" I inwardly groaned because it immediately indicated two possibilities: Either the friend was lying and it was just a set-up to string Brandon along, or it meant that everything was going to be resolved purely through outside forces that appeared suddenly in the penultimate chapter. Both are bad ways to end the story because in the first instance, we've established that Joe is stupid and oblivious so there is no way he could anticipate that Brandon was suicidal, and the second is just the most boring kind of deus ex machina. I don't offer this criticism to slam the author, this is offered in good faith so that future efforts can be improved. The set-up and world-building was promising but the characters needed work. The villain needed to be less of a caricature, the protagonist needed something to do, and the ending was flawed and needed to be re-written.

Fucking hot stuff! And good writing!

My God, your sensitivity touches me. Marry me!!

Me hubiese gustado ver un poco más del abuelo corrompiendo a su nieto

I enjoyed part 2 a lot. This was really hot tonread,thank you! Of course,we'd love to see more but considering this was supposed to be a one-off we can be lucky we got a part 2 at all. Still,if inspiration strikes again...please do more lol

Oh gads, I had tears in my eyes before I got to the end of the first paragraph (and how much more so by the end of the story). Having just come from a "critical discussion" of one of the latest stories (which I find to be less of a story but just a concatenation of incidents designed to show off increasingly wild sexual exploits), I come to this story which is exactly the opposite. Not only is the writing and planning so exceptionally wonderful, but the ability to make characters and their experiences (and their dreams) so very real so as to induce great empathy is really an amazing talent. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful.

What a lovely ending, it should happen to all the Coopers in this world!

The most epic story ever

I too am cheering for Larry. I need some conflict. I recall that Zach has the ability to use "I think" on Larry, perhaps that would be an interesting twist. Hmmm....:thinking: