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Marc
5/30/22, 9:11 PM
Very hot story :slightly_smiling_face:
M
5/30/22, 6:57 PM
Good story. I can see that the rookie ends up on the officer dick and forced to inhale slutsmoke.
Blue moon under hell
5/30/22, 6:19 PM
I really want to give danny a hug here I hope he manages to get his revenge on David soon
5/30/22, 4:13 PM
I hope David has this whole thing turned on him, he deserves it, the rage I feel reading his actions is so full on and I can't wait for his comeuppance
5/30/22, 3:44 PM
David is getting worse and worse with every chapter—a testament to your skill as an author. I feel absolutely NO sympathy for him: he is a textbook abuser, getting off on power and making it literally impossible to be criticized. And his disgusting justifications: “It’s just a little fun,” “It’s YOUR fault for being boring,” etc., are also hitting home. I hope David gets his just deserts, and Danny gets to escape to find someone who truly loves him.
5/30/22, 3:34 PM
i honestly hope that Danny can free himself from his toxic bf. I dont want to see him lost
5/30/22, 2:51 PM
Does David really still love Danny, it seems like he doesn't?
5/28/22, 2:42 PM
I think this works better than the previous chapter. Prayer is kinda boring to be honest. Any horny I get gets offset by hisbrun in a mill pervertness. Generic pervert master 101 material. A best thing in a hypnosis story is to not get into an asshole master( unless that's your thing). It takes me out of the experience personally. In the last chapter I could barely get hard on while the first chapter and this one gets me 11/10. Anyway good writing as always. Just hate pryer personally. Hate generic assholes especially generic gay assholes.

5/30/22, 9:03 AM
@Harolf Oh, I completely disagree, this chapter actually didn't do that much for me. 100% into the reverse-hypno/corruption kink and Ed does it best.

5/30/22, 2:36 PM
@Doopboopdoop y’all kinda hit the nail on the head as to why I wrote it this way. Some people have told me they love the tists perspective and some the subs. I figured it would be fun to explore both at the same moments, both so fans could have their preference and so it could be a fun challenge for me to keep it interesting. That said, in the coming chapters, there will be moments that Pryer is present but the sub I’m writing about is elsewhere. So those that find it repetitive will also get a bit of what they want. This story is one I’m quite proud of. And so happy for all the comments and emails. Y’all are the best.
5/30/22, 1:13 PM
Oh this is such a hot premise! I love it already.
5/30/22, 1:03 PM
As I post this novel, I'm rereading it myself. It's been almost a year since I've read it last -- since working on the second book in the series (CENTAUROMACHY), anyway -- and I'd forgotten a lot of this chapter's contents. I think it builds really well and leaves us on my favorite line in the novel -- that whole _"I run to my fallen Erastês, spitting 'KILL HIM!' to Cavalier and my herd. 'KILL HERACLES!'”_ gets me every time. The "Mad Scene" was the writing challenge in this chapter, trying to communicate Pholus' perceptions being torn between two realities. Imagine how cool that would look on the page if the Magic Realm was a different font or character style... Sigh. Anyway -- next chapter gives us the climax. Hang tight.