Recent Comments

Nutiper
5/28/22, 6:56 PM
It's good to see you back! This is such an inventive, intriguing premise and a great start to the story. Seeing the way Travis and Chance navigate the literalness of the "promises" during the blowjob scene was great. Plus, of course, the heavy implication that Maria only left Ben because of a "promise" — _and_ that it was further "promises" which transformed her in various ways... It all does a great job of giving us the rules of how things work in this story, and foreshadows things to come... Also I _am_ a sucker for nice descriptions of butts, but this part definitely caught my attention: > > Ben rolled his eyes and continued on his way. Chance cocked his head to one side as his eyeline drifted down to Ben’s pants, watching his two hefty buns bounce back and forth as he walked. ”Damn,” Chance muttered. Especially since, seeing the way the rules for the "promises" require Chance to use them frequently and only for selfish reasons... Well, I'm intrigued to see how things develop, and where you take the story. Looking forward to reading more!
5/28/22, 3:01 AM
Get Dusty to help him, because having an ally on your side is better than being by yourself. Dusty seems to know much more about the game rules than Rusty does. While both of them are now extremely submissive, they still have their Dominance stat unchanged. Just have to get Rusty tired out. Other than that, this is an awesome chapter. So many more rules of the game gradually revealed and taking place. I actually want Carter to add Personality slider, if it's possible, and try being a full on Jock for a while, just to satisfy Rusty enough. Maybe it'll get the game finished faster. There's already too many stories where the apparent villain wins, turning normal and likable characters into messed up versions of their envisioning. Hoping that it could develop where both parties got what they wanted. Of course, Rusty could order Carter to add stuff in, which would end the story of he submitted.

5/28/22, 7:05 AM
@ChronoSeth But Carter doesn't really want any of this. The only reason he was caving in the first place on it was because Dusty has perfect charisma and intelligence and could presumably sweet talk anyone into doing anything. Also like, pretty much any story with mind control or transformation where it sticks is a villain, regardless of if the victim is "happy" or not. They altered a person's personality and/or body without them consenting or having any way to control the situation. It's so weird when people get on the moral high ground about these stories like you can realistically apply any morality to it.

5/28/22, 6:42 PM
@Silvoid That's true, I can see how appeasing Rusty is a non-consensual thing to do, as the villain is getting what he wants and he could make the changes to Carter stick which is what said victim doesn't want. I'm rooting for Carter to fight back and win against Rusty, as I don't like reading a doomed story.
5/28/22, 6:28 PM
You took a scene that has already excited and aroused so many and added even more exquisite eroticism. It’s sad Mowgli was eaten simply because it would’ve been lovely to read more of Kaa playing with the helpless man cub.
5/28/22, 5:58 PM
Not my usual cup of tea, but this was really hot. And more importantly, what a beautiful exploration of human connection and emotion. This story stands so well on it’s own, beyond the erotica. Bravo.
Jockmorphr
5/28/22, 4:07 PM
It’s the leakings for me. 🤤
abc123
5/28/22, 3:21 PM
If you write a book, i would definitely buy 10 copies
5/28/22, 2:58 PM
Great start. I'm looking forward to see where you take it. Thanks!
5/28/22, 2:44 PM
Also add the humiliation tag. I think it's in there somewhere.
5/28/22, 2:38 PM
Very interesting! Chance seems like a sweet, decent guy…I do hope this doesn’t turn into a “power corrupts” story. :p
5/28/22, 2:33 PM
Fight it, possibly combining with getting Dusty to help. Rusty continues to be the absolute WORST, and I want to see him lose. :p I also want to give you praise, though, for using Dusty to show how a *proper* sex maniac behaves. :p That is, whereas Rusty has no social skills and just keeps whining/demanding that he’s right/insisting on Carter doing what he wants (and thereby sexually harassing him), Dusty instead takes Carter’s words in stride and respects his wishes (with the subtle undercurrent of “let me try to charm you into it”). Again, it’s a testimony to your skill as a writer that the characters and audience response are so vibrant. :D