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5/20/22, 11:01 PM
I thought I had commented around the competition, but I didn't. This is such a good one to revisit. Incredibly hot, and incredibly well-written. And also makes you think, because as others have commented, it's clearly a "happy ending for the reader" story, but there are elements of horror when taken out of context. It goes to show how powerful framing is -- the loving couple/POV character is happy at the end, and the villain character is upset, so it's a "good guys prevail" story, even if they don't go back to normal (which would obvi be a disappointment for this audience, lmfao). It's exactly the sort of stuff I come to these sites for, because I can be thinking all of that while jerking off to some hot porn. I mean, what else can I ask for?

5/22/22, 6:54 PM
@Razz TFs Oh, thanks! I didn't expect more comments on this one! I'm not one for didactic smut. Good things happening to good people and bad things happening to bad people gets boring. I just like writing about things happening to people! A bit of chaos makes the world go 'round.
5/22/22, 6:49 PM
Thanks for the suggestions, everybody! I've already started the next installment, but feel free to keep commenting. You can probably expect chapter 2 next weekend.
5/21/22, 10:01 AM
This is really interesting! Well-written as always and I like the part where his mind splits into two. Rusty is obnoxious of course, as he's supposed to be—I don't mind how rapey he is in the context of a story like this, nor do I feel like it's necessary for him to get comeuppance for his actions, but I do think it will be more enjoyable if he doesn't just straightforwardly get what he wants from the start. I guess I vote for Carter to change his stats in some way that would help him get an advantage in the next part.

5/22/22, 6:47 PM
@drummer Thanks for the compliments! This story is going to be more complicated than Rusty just getting everything he wants or a revenge fic!
5/20/22, 5:39 AM
Love this idea and so well written. Can't wait to see how it pans out. Really happy to see big sub/small top stuff on here. My vote would be change his stats.

5/22/22, 6:41 PM
@fanboi214 Thanks! This is my first time writing big sub/small top so hopefully it ends up working for people!
5/20/22, 3:44 AM
Whoa, this hits the right buttons and I'm excited to see this continue! A bit iffy on the constant dumb jock comments and while I do want him to be one, hoping it's only that dumb jock other Carter to affect stud nerd Carter's thoughts. I'm voting for him to Confront Rusty and try to at least make consented changes or to make the changes enjoyable for his real self. EDIT : I also have a theory that as a Game Master, Rusty can add things to Carter and remove things he added, but not remove what's been set by Carter having followed the rules of character creation and the game itself setting things up like his Sewing 3 skill.

5/22/22, 6:40 PM
@ChronoSeth Thanks! The mechanics will be explained a bit more next chapter.
Anonymous
5/20/22, 3:40 AM
ooo i like this so far. hope rusty gets just as fucked up as he's dishing out lmao, altho ofc considering ur track record i'll probably enjoy anything you write. i say change his stats!

5/22/22, 6:40 PM
@ Thanks! It definitely won't be a straightforward journey for the characters!
5/20/22, 3:02 AM
Interesting. The idea of rpg made real is super fun and sexy.

5/22/22, 6:39 PM
@Heru Kane Thanks!
5/20/22, 2:36 AM
Having read a bunch of drafts of this, I’m really curious to see how and where it goes. It’s a really fun and hot setup and I really enjoyed both the characters.

5/22/22, 6:39 PM
@MonsterMash62 Thanks for help with editing and ideas! (And for commenting even when you're probably sick of seeing drafts :sweat_smile:)
Anonymous
5/22/22, 6:32 PM
Great chapter
Anonymous
5/22/22, 6:11 PM
So hot! It’ll be a long week before Friday…