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Jay
5/21/22, 7:15 AM
This was a really sweet story and a joy to read! Hope it all works out well for Ryder & Jeremy :smiling_face_with_three_hearts:
5/21/22, 4:44 AM
This was fun (and it's always a pleasure to see hypnotized Chat Noir). Short, sweet, and well executed. Nice work.
Sep
5/21/22, 4:18 AM
Thanks for the input, I went back and correct most of the verb tenses, so I hope it makes more sense.
5/21/22, 3:32 AM
You definitely captured the theme of the contest with this one! I thought it was clever how you used the jocks' comments to reveal the "rules" of the changes. And although I got worried for a sec when Alex asked his last question, it was good to see how Colin reacted and how that changed things. A very interesting method of reality change, using agreement and conformity as part of it! I will say, see if you can get some practice or an editor's help on your use of tenses—you flew around a bunch toward the beginning when you were writing the lead-up. But once the actual scene was going, you used the past tense consistently! You asked how to make it hotter—I don't get off to reality change stories myself, but from what I've heard from friends, reality changes that involve a change to the person are hottest when you describe the change _happening_. Take that with a grain of salt, because sudden realisations can be fun, too. I think bluesuedewho's [_Magic Textbook_](https://www.gaykinkystories.com/series/show/10000971) is a well-loved work, and a standard-setter, in the reality change arena, so you can likely pick up some cues from there for your future writing endeavours. For a first work this shows good promise, and I wish you the best of luck writing more! EDIT: I forgot to add how fucking _clever_ that title is. Genius.
Jamiemboy
5/21/22, 2:34 AM
Hot :) more please!!
5/21/22, 2:17 AM
Damn, this made me unload a bunch of times when I read and re-read it. The dark evil that's presented in a very realistic way is very hot.
5/21/22, 2:07 AM
I enjoy a romance-only story on the site, and I enjoyed the set up for the start of Ryder and Jeremy's burgeoning relationship. Please continue their story!
5/20/22, 11:17 PM
One of the things I really.like about your stories is that the people who get changed into needly little cocksluts tend to deserve it. I hope Carter changes his stats and Rusty ends up getting his comeuppance in the end. That said,.if Carter takes a trip through empty headed jockslut territory before ending up on top, I wouldn't complain.

Anonymous
5/21/22, 1:39 AM
@SageKepler Oooh, "deserve" is an interesting word here! Idk if I think of many of this author's stories through that lens, tbh? Most of the "needy little cocksluts" he writes tend to really _enjoy_ their transformations lol, so I rarely see it as a punishment or a bad thing. Taking away things Carter cares about (like his brain) is a lot more invasive than making him capable of prostate orgasms lol, so I could see the story going a lot of ways! Rusty is annoying but I don't think he needs to end up a sub for the story to have a "happy ending" really
Martin
5/20/22, 8:36 PM
A very lovely story. And so far it doesn't need any MC aspect. I'd actually prefer if Ryder is truthful and was always secretly in love with Jer, Comet or not! Please keep going with this!

5/21/22, 12:24 AM
@Martin i like the idea that the wish just brought their emotions to light rather than manufactured them. There are a couple of stories on this sight with that premise and i always enjoy them
5/20/22, 11:33 AM
Amazing ending! As @Hypnothrill said, I was wondering how the hero would be suddenly reverted to his true self, and this did not disappoint. The explanation as to WHY the town changes people is also great: very sci-fi, and yet terrifyingly plausible. And like the best stories on here, it raises fascinating questions: what does it it mean to be happy? Is getting something that everyone ostensibly likes the secret? And can you truly be happy if your ability to feel other emotions disappear? In short, amazing work! :)

5/20/22, 11:40 AM
@Feed Your Head, thank you for the amazing comment. There were so many things that played into my creative process for this one, and you hit on most of them. The other thing that I thought about as I wrote this is that in the digital age, with Instagram, Pinterest, etc., most people post a version of reality that is a little more perfect than the life they actually experience… what would it be if that illusion became reality but it was nothing more than the illusion itself, without the emotion of living…

5/21/22, 12:05 AM
@Jeep Hooray! I am always so glad when people like my comments. And that’s very true. Curated content is creepy—why do we fear showing how we really feel to the world? And when people do, they are often accused of attention-seeking…maybe it is because there cannot be “raw emotion” in the digital world (you always have to type and arrange and hit “Post”). Your stories are so great at raising questions! :D

5/21/22, 12:15 AM
@Feed Your Head thank you! I hope they are sexy, but I also hope that I tell a good story as well… and a good story should, IMHO, make you think, feel, or both…