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5/20/22, 11:27 AM
I echo all the comments about what a horrible person Rusty is. :p I don’t like stories where jerks like him—who are also internalized homophobes, if we’re fair—have lots of power. I get that that does it for some people, but not me, especially because (as others have also said) Carter is such a nice, interesting guy. And he’s not the classic “I don’t want to bottom because that’s gay” trope—he doesn’t want to bottom because he doesn’t enjoy it, which is totally fair and understandable. A good-natured character not consenting and then being forced to by a jerk is not a fun time for me, but to each their own! Is there a character sheet option to A. Punch Rusty in the face and then B. Pull some of the dick out of his personality? :p

En Vogue
5/20/22, 2:49 PM
@Feed Your Head Eh, I mean, if Carter immediately flips the tables on Rusty, the story pretty much just... ends? At Chapter 2? Carter *is* fun and a great character, but "bad guy gets power and wreaks havoc for the duration of the plot until the good guy is able to overpower him" is just a way more interesting story than "good guy immediately grabs power from bad guy, ends any conflict and drama by chapter 2". So I vote that Carter confront Rusty, but then that things keep getting complicated in unexpected ways as Carter struggles to regain an upper hand!
Hob
5/20/22, 2:44 PM
It's always funny when I fall in love with a story that the author thinks is a mess. Hopefully we get more!
R P
5/20/22, 2:33 PM
This is sweet and so lovely! I hope you do decide to write more about Jeremy and Ryder.
5/20/22, 2:15 PM
@EdIam would love some stealing boyfriends in your stories please... 🙏
5/20/22, 2:13 PM
A NOTE FROM THE APPROVERS TEAM: The text was pasted twice, so I removed the duplicate.
5/20/22, 2:11 PM
This sounds like it’s going to be great fun! I like how from the get-go it’s uncertain whether or not his wish actually came true, or if Ryder, like the MC, wanted to tell MC he loved him. I’m excited to see more.
5/20/22, 2:00 PM
This premise has a lot of potential, and I mean even outside this website, if you address the implications of this wish and how it can reflect on their relationship from now on. I think you should invest in it, I really liked this concept.
Anonymous
5/20/22, 1:43 PM
Confront Rusty (use those wit and manipulation stars while he’s still got ‘em)
5/20/22, 10:56 AM
Love this conclusion! I'd been wondering how Rocco would temporarily break free of his conditioning, and the lightning strike is a great idea. I'm just a little sad that he doesn't move in with Bryce at the end!

5/20/22, 11:33 AM
@Hypnothrill I considered that as an ending, but that kind of dead ended the story for me… I think it’s a better ending that Rocco is about to convert the new neighbor the same way that Bryce converted him, but by bit until he also is part of the Interactive… and don’t worry Rocco and Bryce still have plenty of glossy shiny sex…

5/20/22, 1:27 PM
@Jeep I did really like the story coming full circle with Rocco as the smiling, too-perfect neighbor. Now all I want for Christmas is a sequel showing what happens when the Elysian Interactive App is launched nationwide.

5/20/22, 1:40 PM
@Hypnothrill you may get your wish… I left some Easter eggs to explore, and another reason for the ending to this part is that it leaves open the possibility of more product testing on the new neighbor and others, and it also opens up the possibility of telling a story of what happens as the world comes online with the new app… if you have any thoughts or ideas I’d like to hear them because you are one of the best authors on here!
5/20/22, 1:07 PM
can you continue, please