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5/20/22, 2:00 PM
This premise has a lot of potential, and I mean even outside this website, if you address the implications of this wish and how it can reflect on their relationship from now on. I think you should invest in it, I really liked this concept.
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5/20/22, 1:43 PM
Confront Rusty (use those wit and manipulation stars while he’s still got ‘em)
5/20/22, 10:56 AM
Love this conclusion! I'd been wondering how Rocco would temporarily break free of his conditioning, and the lightning strike is a great idea. I'm just a little sad that he doesn't move in with Bryce at the end!

5/20/22, 11:33 AM
@Hypnothrill I considered that as an ending, but that kind of dead ended the story for me… I think it’s a better ending that Rocco is about to convert the new neighbor the same way that Bryce converted him, but by bit until he also is part of the Interactive… and don’t worry Rocco and Bryce still have plenty of glossy shiny sex…

5/20/22, 1:27 PM
@Jeep I did really like the story coming full circle with Rocco as the smiling, too-perfect neighbor. Now all I want for Christmas is a sequel showing what happens when the Elysian Interactive App is launched nationwide.

5/20/22, 1:40 PM
@Hypnothrill you may get your wish… I left some Easter eggs to explore, and another reason for the ending to this part is that it leaves open the possibility of more product testing on the new neighbor and others, and it also opens up the possibility of telling a story of what happens as the world comes online with the new app… if you have any thoughts or ideas I’d like to hear them because you are one of the best authors on here!
5/20/22, 1:07 PM
can you continue, please
5/20/22, 11:30 AM
Really enjoy that story!! Personnally I'd love to see Jay resisting a fair bit when Ian tries to subdue him.
5/19/22, 11:35 PM
I guess confront rusty or run seem like the best. This is a cool looking series, I hope you continue the wholesome super villain one!

5/20/22, 1:44 AM
@Botbot Thanks! I have some note scribbled down for that one.

5/20/22, 11:20 AM
@bluesuedewho cool! I'm excited to read more :)
5/20/22, 11:14 AM
The scene where AppleJack and Pokey meet is one of my favorite moments in the book. The "I hate this kid" line cracks me up. This brings up an interesting bit with their names. At first, I considered using names of centaurs from myth (there are easily two or three dozen cited in the ancient texts), but then I thought it would be more fun to use modern-day, goofy horse names for them. Then it became a matter of justifying their names in backstory. (It was my intent to use Pokey's last name "Dakota" when the centaurs achieved their "Bestial" Forms -- see chapter 5 -- in an effort to be more "formal") But Pokey is not to be stopped. Anyway, for "AppleJack" I longed considered "Oatmeal" and (as readers of CENTAUROMACHY can attest:) "Graham Cracker"
5/20/22, 9:54 AM
Haha thanks guys keep me posted on what you want to see next. Next chapter won’t be released until Monday night probably.

5/20/22, 10:43 AM
@Anyonka i really am enjoying your story, fuck its so erotic to take someones bkyfriend away, it would be nicer to see ian start to make jay feel jealous, make collin slutty around ian and make him a little aloft from jay. Eitherway i really do enjoy the story and i am looking forward for the next chapter.
5/20/22, 10:23 AM
FUCKING AWESOME WRITING. Carry on!
5/20/22, 9:22 AM
My god that was hot. Nothing hotter than brainwashing someone's boyfriend ☺