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May 19, 2022
Anonymous
5/20/22, 11:19 AM
Why are these protags so easy to drag into signing a contract without having a lawyer review it first? I mean, I get it, deal with the devil and all, but I've always been of the mindset that the best way to beat a devil of detail is to bring a decent lawyer to the game. Oh, now I'm getting ideas for how you can have Peter get buyer's remorse and ask a lawyer for help with finding a loophole or exit clause. Of course, they say that law's one DEVIL of a profession, so why not turn it into spiritual litigation?

5/20/22, 8:10 PM
Hahaha well if they read the contract like a normal person, the story wouldn’t be interesting eh 😜 thanks for the comment! Hope you enjoyed the story <3

Anonymous
5/20/22, 8:16 PM
@Grant Spiral Rest assured, this only means you get to make things interesting for him after the fact! Imagine having Peter ask the company's in-house counsel to help with the contract, only for him to get a lecture on "I represent the company, not you, and if I help you with this I could be disbarred." Then he has to find HIS OWN LAWYER, maybe one of the guys who fucks him on a recurring basis in his new life, and wouldn't ya know it, he just happens to practice employment and labor law and represent employees! Maybe work a bit of "alternative payment methods" in there, and you could set up quite the dramatic confrontation between Peter and Hendrick as they fight over which laws should control his life!
5/20/22, 8:12 PM
Gotta say, this is a thoroughly underappreciated story. I consider this an absolute classic already.
5/20/22, 7:52 PM
This gets better and better. Hoping you have more than one more chapter in you.
5/20/22, 7:11 PM
Awesome. I love it. Can't wait for more!
5/20/22, 5:10 PM
Oh, what a wonderful story. You have some of the best characterizations I’ve ever read. And the kiss was more intimate than a thousand sex scenes. Isn’t that funny?…yes, this is an absolutely amazing tale. I hope you continue it, but the most important thing is that you write what YOU want to write! :)
5/20/22, 4:10 PM
I love a story with a good jock slut soooo against my better judgement, I'm rooting for rusty to continue on. Just let it happen Carter. 🙈
5/20/22, 3:29 PM
Well this is a promising development. :) Thanks again, Rubberfelix!
5/20/22, 3:21 PM
Such a hot chapter! The control is quick and so far, irrevocable , which makes it hotter. I'm loving how he is assigning them roles and fostering their desire for hypnosis. Can't wait to see Sett betray the twins, and eventually, for Jay to find out of the betrayal and futilely try to get away.
5/20/22, 3:04 PM
I'm enjoying this story a lot. Are you interested in posting it on Metabods? Let me know brk@metabods.com
5/20/22, 11:27 AM
I echo all the comments about what a horrible person Rusty is. :p I don’t like stories where jerks like him—who are also internalized homophobes, if we’re fair—have lots of power. I get that that does it for some people, but not me, especially because (as others have also said) Carter is such a nice, interesting guy. And he’s not the classic “I don’t want to bottom because that’s gay” trope—he doesn’t want to bottom because he doesn’t enjoy it, which is totally fair and understandable. A good-natured character not consenting and then being forced to by a jerk is not a fun time for me, but to each their own! Is there a character sheet option to A. Punch Rusty in the face and then B. Pull some of the dick out of his personality? :p

En Vogue
5/20/22, 2:49 PM
@Feed Your Head Eh, I mean, if Carter immediately flips the tables on Rusty, the story pretty much just... ends? At Chapter 2? Carter *is* fun and a great character, but "bad guy gets power and wreaks havoc for the duration of the plot until the good guy is able to overpower him" is just a way more interesting story than "good guy immediately grabs power from bad guy, ends any conflict and drama by chapter 2". So I vote that Carter confront Rusty, but then that things keep getting complicated in unexpected ways as Carter struggles to regain an upper hand!