Recent Comments

5/12/22, 4:12 AM
I like this series tremendously! Thanks for writing it! A few little grammar comments: Your prepositions (on, in, etc.) are confusing. Secondly, I know you are doing this in 3rd person, but sometimes its unclear as to whose perspective we are in with reading further in the paragraph.

5/12/22, 3:01 PM
@tankonpoint Thanks for your comment! Oh yeah, prepositions are a bane of me since English is not my native language and the "on/in/at" is usually confusing to me, sorry about that. I will check how to make the perspective clearer in the future. Thanks!
5/12/22, 2:28 PM
😍😍😍😍
haha
5/12/22, 9:36 AM
Your writing draws out my semen🤩😍
5/12/22, 8:06 AM
This story gives off the best, sweetest, sexiest, and most importantly, exciting vibes. I love this little universe you built and you keep building with suspense and exciting reveals. Can't wait for more!
Anonymous
5/12/22, 6:05 AM
awesome story. love a good takedown story where a hot stud gets turned into a slutty pussy bitch. I really love the slow take down and how you describe what's going on in his mind, and how he's getting turned on being humiliated and turned into a pussy bitch in heat. if ya write a part 2, I hope they make him wear slutty lace panties, thigh highs and garters when they fuck him. maybe they make him wear the lingerie under his clothes at the bar/gym and he's humiliated but also turned on, all day long, thinking of what a slutty pussy bitch he's become. Do you have a version of this where a younger (legal) guy takes down a hot older (even a few yrs older is ok) straight jock stud? If so i'd be awesome if you could post it up.
5/12/22, 5:59 AM
Would love to see someone claim Dibs on Jason Mamoa
May 11, 2022
5/11/22, 8:07 AM
I second @Hypnothrill on the ending--it was a surprisingly sad twist. I'm so used to actual reality warping in your stories, Mr. Cici, that I did not expect the "all just a dream" trope. It works well, but there's a definite melancholy to it, especially because we only see the "new" Trey right before he's restored to his old world. Well done...

Willie Cici
5/12/22, 2:35 AM
When I was in school, I read a short story by Ambrose Bierce, "An Occurrence at Owl Creek Bridge". That story was the inspiration for this story, and some other that I have written that use this ending.

5/12/22, 5:48 AM
@Willie Cici Ooh, I know that story. It's a famous one. It, too, has a heartbreaking ending.
5/11/22, 8:54 PM
Time, this is absolutely unreasonably _pretty_, and I found myself drawn inexorably through the story by the writing. I’ve half a mind to continue reading—though I’m busy, so I don’t know—there’s so much here I look forward to unpacking. You did marvellously.

5/12/22, 3:08 AM
@Soren Fitz Ahh, thank you so much! I'm glad you felt drawn in -- I hope you do decide to continue, when time allows. There are some parts with hypnosis you may want to skip (that's fine so long as you have the context around them), but I think there's a lot more that you would probably enjoy between Sawyer and Lock.
Anonymous
5/12/22, 2:32 AM
Incredible!!!!
5/12/22, 1:48 AM
Realmente original, disfrute la premisa.